The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
To live a life full of luxury and convenience removes one from the stress of having to do basic life chores. To have luxuries and conveniences, such as money, paid services, and advanced technology allow people to pay others to do certain work for them. Hence, the individuals with such luxuries and conveniences do not truly learn how to become strong and independent. While it may not be true that luxuries and conveniences do not prevent people from honing important life skills for independence, one has to consider the life one is positioned in to determine strength and independence.
Having luxuries and conveniences prevents basic life skills that are important to independence. For instance, if one has the ability to pay for services, such as cooking, cleaning, and doing laundry, then the individual misses out on being able to hone skills that are essential to everyday life. If the paid services were to be absent, then the individual would become lost and unsure how to manage life without the basic life skills. Additionally, being born into a wealthy family also hinders important life skills, such as work ethics. For instance, a child born into a wealthy family may grow up assuming that money will always be at hand and not have to worry about where the money comes from. However, when the child becomes an independent adult, he or she will not understand how to earn money and how to find a job. The child then misses out on work skills, such as how to have a good interview, how to communicate, and how to collaborate in a work environment.
While luxuries and conveniences prevent the development of important life skills for strength and independence, others may argue that it is not true. People who have the wealth or ability to pay others to do tasks for them allows them to become independent. For instance, a wealthy doctor may pay a maid to cook, clean, and do laundry while being able to do independent work, such as developing a new treatment method in replacement to surgery. On the other hand, a child who grows up into a wealthy family may be able to be strong and independent by gaining skills from tutors and technology that the wealthy family was able to pay for them. Although skills aren’t lost when having luxuries and conveniences, it does hinder the ability to become stronger and more independent.
In summary, luxuries and conveniences prevent people from honing skills that are important for strength and independence. While it may be true that skills and abilities can be developed with luxuries and conveniences, it actually prohibits the individual from being able to grow on their own.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, however, if, may, so, then, while, as to, for instance, in summary, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87555555556 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80884317825 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.393333333333 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6261452058 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 121.888888889 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163770609307 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752742877426 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528795328093 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132520737162 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433409586894 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.