Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
One major influence for the extinction of endangered species results from human activities. However, human activities are not the only reason why an endangered species goes extinct. Therefore, I cannot completely agree with the implementation of a policy that only creates efforts to save an endangered species based solely on human activities. Other factors must be accounted for to save an endangered species.
Many endangered species that have gone extinct were the result of human activities. Therefore, it would make sense to implement a policy that saves an endangered species due to human influence. For instance, many corporations have committed deforestation in order to create products for human consumption. Deforestation has led to the destruction of many plants and trees. Another human activity would be pollution. Many humans have thrown waste into the oceans that have potentially harmed and even killed species. Even the amount of disposal that is dumped into landfills eventually enter the bodies of waters that harm species. There are several campaigns that go around to reduce or prohibit the use of plastics, such as straws, that have harmed sea turtles. Likewise, hunting contributes to the extinction of a species. The elephant population has died out due to hunters that seek to exploit their tusks for merchandise. For the aforementioned reasons, it would make sense to implement a policy to save endangered species due to the heedless actions of humans.
However, human actions are not the only major reasons for the extinction of a species. For instance, baneful fungi have the potential to wipe out a species. A frog species in Panama was wiped out due to a poisonous fungi that consumed the electrolytes of frogs and extirpated the species. Another potential harm to the extinction of a species is when there is a lack of reproduction. A species goes extinct because the population is not reproductive. Additionally, a species goes extinct when there are only a few members left in the colony, which may not be due to the human race, but due to changes in environment and weather patterns. Furthermore, it is crucial that the implementation of a policy acknowledges that human activities are not the only reasons for the extinction of a species. Other factors, such as a harmful fungi and lack of reproduction, are pertinent elements to consider in order to save a species.
In summary, I cannot completely agree with the implementation of a policy that only acknowledges the survival of a species due to human activities. If the policy was implemented, then it will only focus on saving some species, while other species go extinct. Hence, the policy should not be implemented, but should be revised to consider other factors that go into the survival of endangered species.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, likewise, may, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2353.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14879649891 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02076060179 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404814004376 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9023998429 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.5 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5769230769 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316948623311 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109655090766 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762266263668 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228184696695 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502297886403 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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