Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take

Saving endangered species is crucial for us as human beings, since most of the reasons lead to their extinction are caused by us. However, if the ongoing extinction has nothing to do with us? Some may suggest we should step back and let it happen, I take the opposite opinion.

First, from the science classes we have taken since elementary school, we all know that every species has an important position in the food chain maintaining the ecosystem, if one is erased from the chain, it will cause the butterfly chain effect to the whole ecosystem. For example, once in Taiwan, deer was very commonplace, until more and more people had come to Taiwan and seen its skin as goods and started hunting deer, the deer population has dropped significantly. The ramification is that since deer is the main food source of the bears, the harder the bears can get their food, the lesser the bears’ population remains, so, the bears had also become rearer. Thus, we can see the chain effect coming from one species is extinct or nearly extinct.

Second, since the industrialization, human has drastically changed the surface and the weather of the planet and the change has been so quickly, not every species can catch up with the continuing change of the living environment, even human cannot withstand the extreme hot and cold weather nowadays. For example, hot waves in Europe and Japan have caused some death, and the wildfire in Australia is deadly, it is causing koalas nearly extinct. So while taking action saving endangered species, we are also saving ourselves.

Further, even some might say that we are not responsible for all endangered species, extinction is due to the competition in nature, it is a natural process of making room for other species having the ability to adapt the nature. Still, it is hard to identify whether or not the potential extinction is caused by humans. Just like the above-mentioned example, we, human, made the deer population drop, but then the bear population has also dropped, how do we clarify the cause of the latter? Eventually, it seems like all the extinction has its way to be traced back to us, humans.

Base on the above-mentioned ideas, since we have to take responsibility for the ramification, i.e., ongoing extinction happening around the globe, which is caused by us, it is crucial for us to take action and save those endangered species.

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Average: 7.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 261, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, thus, while, even so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90171990172 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7103109352 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528255528256 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0550612699 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.0 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1333333333 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187086612153 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702420014252 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572068469031 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124230952899 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425875198599 0.0667264976115 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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