The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
At present, development in technology, automotive, various artificial intelligence and other sector is at its pinnacle. Of course more advancement is possible but, current sophistication also, cannot be called jejune. The prompt discusses that these luxuries have had negative impact on people and degrading their ascetic and strong behaviours. I concede that improper use of any objects have negative impacts but mostly disagree with the propt in two ways.
It can be agreed that there are some individuals who sit all day in their home or office in front of computer, a breakthrough of technology, travel in their vechiles, use their mobile devices to inform them of every activities and even do basic works depending on technology. This is obviously not good and the person becomes gradually dull, his health starts detoriating and this complete reliance on technology has long-term effect on the person. This is a negative part of the use of technology, not the tehnology itself and it is known that everything has its good as well as bad aspects.
But, proper use of technology is a boon and we can explore furter limits with the help of these developments. People are now able to travel from one corner of world to another corner easily in a short time. It is posible to study about the required field sitting in home in front of laptop. These conviniences havenot made people weak and dependent but have increased the easiness in daily activities so that people can focus more on their activities. For example, a child can now go to school on bus on his own without his parents nearby. Moreover, traveling by bus to school saves a child more than an hour of a day as well as he won't get tired going to and coming from school. So the child can focus more on education. Technology has made our day to day life easier and also helps to increase our attention in the area where it is most needed.
Further, technology are made by humans. Humans have full control over these devices whereas the opposite is not possible. An artificial device can never manipulate a human. Technology have given those things that people have never dreamed of. Flying in a plane, carrying a mobile phone in pocket are man-made objects. If people were satisfied in these materials, then they could be said dependent but humans are striving to make more faster and larger planes. They are indulged in further development of these mobile phones having added a new feature to it almost daily. Having these evidence humans can ever be termed weak and dependent to technology.
Thus in conclusion it can be said that, technology and luxury have made human life easier and made them able to explore limits that were precendently thought impossible. It is to the use of such technology that develops some negative opinions regarding its existence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 459, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 4, column 430, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...pendent but humans are striving to make more faster and larger planes. They are indulged in...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...med weak and dependent to technology. Thus in conclusion it can be said that, tech...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, of course, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2347.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 482.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86929460581 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66292510034 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529045643154 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0936085453 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.88 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.28 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0730283102647 0.243740707755 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0201811606539 0.0831039109588 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0242349417833 0.0758088955206 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0449517615777 0.150359130593 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244503406938 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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