The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
To recount from the statement, it is important to note, before the debate can be substantiated, that luxuries aren't the fruit of contemporary life. The definition of sumptuous living might have evolved along the development of our societies, but right from the Renaissance period, opulence existed and have always been a form of myth. I am thus in accordance with the author, about luxuries preventing people from carving out strong personality's traits, but this isn't contigent upon modern society. The race to wealth, independetly of time and places, was, is and will be a bulwark against personal flourishing.
Uptake and influence of modern culture, or how we use new technologies, are personal choices. Many people keep tackling problems head on, embrace causes, or engage in associations; and all are defining constituents of the strong and independent development of individuals. Some instruments have permit democratizing problems peculiar to underprivileged surroundings; the ecological consciousness wouldn't have emerged without social medias relaying worldwide the consequences of deforestation. We cannot either ignore that conveniences, accompanied by the struggles toward their position in the society, have permit transforming the routine of many women. Relying on technological material should though, nowadays, be balanced by strong upbringing, and more theoretical discussions.
Materialism is by nature, in its essence, deleterious for the people. Therefore, one should stop and consider why the founders of social networks and gadgets preclude their own children from subscribing it. The laconic message sent to our brain when we use them is indeed insidious. Most of us perceive them, as means of freeing our mind, but the veracity hidden behind their processes is disparate, for they are designed to enslave us. The flowing tide of information, the infinite amount of applications and websites, the race to likes, or social relationships we feed through phonecalls and text-messages, mistakenly give us the impression of being informed and having developed a strong and deep character.
By means of social study, research and academia corroborate that people have tendency to less strive so as to reach their pinnacle in a field, and to more enjoy from the superficial aspects of the contemporary life. Admittedly, modern world may be a stimulus of such behaviours, but can by no stretch be the responsible of the conveniency of people. I would like to lean my argument on the inspiring words of the French singer Jacques Brel "…stupidity is idleness, characterised by the thought : That's enough, I live and I'm fine." The philosopher Kant indeed underlined that laziness was peculiar to human beings; so then, current surroundings at worst, increase our proclivity of being intelectually self-sufficient.
To conclude, modern world waxes our dependence to conveniences, the impact of which have help ameliorate the development of our societies, but often stymies our's as individuals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2567.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.568329718 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31573826434 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613882863341 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.7937933629 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.611111111 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6111111111 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182269477274 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496590150812 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623121965059 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.090194056951 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659896544589 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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