The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
To begin, the people have become highly dependent on the luxuries and conveniences of the present day modern life where everything is available very easily without much hustle. For instance, people are now so dependent on the automobile that they opt a vehicle even for a short distance of about 1km. Earlier, before the advent of these automobiles and all, people used to walk every day to reach their destination. Since walking is really good for health, those people used to have a salubrious life. But now-a-days because of these automobiles, people don't think about walking and they feel that it is too tiring. It is an obvious nature of humans to tend towards something which makes their life easier. Even if there is some problem in a vehicle then there are many other transportation facilities available in the current world. Though these luxuries are aiding the people in finishing their job done quicker and smoother, they are giving birth to many other problems which they are not even aware of. Thus, people should be aware to what extent they are using these luxuries and conveniences present in the current world.
Further, luxuries and conveniences not merely make the life easier they are apparently making people addicted to these and without those comforts people can't even think of leading their normal life.For illustration, consider the person's dependency on phone. People have become so addicted to it means, they use their phones to contact people within the same house.There is no direct interaction with others because of the phone. People can't stay even a single day without a phone. These comforts have become an integral part of their life, which they can't separate from life.When people on the phone, completely forgot the outside world which will then give rise to many accidents. People while crossing roads and while driving use earphones to listen to their favorite music, so because of this they can't listen to the horn sound and which will lead to accidents. So, these comforts should be confined to certain situations and shouldn't become an integral part of life.
Additionally, people are so dependent on these comforts that they are losing self-confidence. For illustration, consider the recent movie on Netflix "The Social Dilemma" which explains how people of this generation are addicted to social media. People try to increase their Facebook and Instagram friends, and consider themselves very famous and social depending on the virtual friends they have on these media, which is totally depressing and so not true. People are not having confidence in themselves to meet new people in person and socialize with them. Thus, people are depending on these virtual friends.Earlier, before the influx of social media, people were having many social gatherings and they used to make friends in real life unlike those virtual friends. So, those people were more confident and used to be mentally strong when compared to people of the current generation. Thus, the comforts of this current world have made people weak and making them lose confidence.
Nonetheless, some might argue that luxuries and conveniences of modern life are making people independent.This is true only in a few cases, for example, a person might be not knowing driving but with the help of the luxuries provided in the current world, he can just book a cab to reach his destination. But he too is dependent on the cab or other transportations available. This is also kind of dependency on these facilities.Thus, people using comforts are definitely becoming weak and more dependent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, if, nonetheless, really, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3024.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 590.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12542372881 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70914906432 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435593220339 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 948.6 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2012972831 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.96 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17879635327 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641316732711 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429460202252 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126466918565 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016579480925 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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