The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The main purpose of people working hard through out their life is to earn luxurious future. However, the prompt suggests that the luxury and conveniences provided to a person can prevent them from being strong and independent individuals. I mostly agree to the prompt that the luxury can be damaging for following three reasons.
First of all, whenever human being begins to get comfort, in most cases, they become indolent. They do not care about the work, the struggles they have to do to become competent. It can even lead to the point where your life might destroyed. For instance, the son of Jackie Chan had all the luxuries in the world. He was buried deep in the comfort and forgot all the life struggles and did not even tried a single competent tasks. Instead, he started involving in drugs and ultimately ended up in jail. His convenient life style made him do nothing and even sacrifice this precious life to drugs let alone doing something to become strong and independent.
Secondly, Luxury can sometime blind us with ego and self sufficiency that we tend to think we need not give our best to any work we do. It is not only about work but also in studies and in following any of our passion, convenience hinders our path to greatness. We choose to do less work, gain less knowledge as we feel we do not need any of those and we have everything we need in this life. Lets take this as an instance. Paul Pogba, after his first game for Manchester United, got all the fame and luxury that he needed in his life. That made him think that he has earned enough already and now can work, in his case, play, minimally and still be the best. He stopped doing hard work and depended on his past achievements and enjoyed his comfort. Eventually, he was surpassed by Bruno, Kante and many other players as best and he could not even be seen in the top 10. So, Luxury can mess up our thinking by making us believe that we have done enough and we do not tend to do more to be stronger and independent.
However, it is not always the case that convenience and luxury weakens our ability. Sometimes, with proper guidance, comfort can lead us to greatness. When people are totally comfortable, they feel no disturbance by all the difficulties to face and struggle to do and they can fully focus on their goal. And even after they reach the goal, the more luxury they earn and that can inspire them to do even beyond. For instance, Cristiano Ronaldo achieved the most luxury a man could have in 2009 when he was transferred to Real Madrid. He could have stopped playing well like Pogba and contributed little to the football world. But instead, he had access to all the convenience necessary for his daily trainings. And he worked even harder and went on to win more Individual and Collective awards for himself, his club and his country. Now, He is the ultimate GOAT(Greatest Of All Time). So, luxury can make you push your limit even harder and farther and make you stronger and independent.
So, I believe this differs from person to person, their aim, their thinking capabilities and the guidance they get. With proper guidance and care, luxury and convenience can help us achieve greatness, make us independent and much stronger while most of the time making us indolent and reducing our worth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 41, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...The main purpose of people working hard through out their life is to earn luxurious future....
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'did' requires base form of the verb: 'try'
Suggestion: try
...all the life struggles and did not even tried a single competent tasks. Instead, he s...
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Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'task'?
Suggestion: task
...d did not even tried a single competent tasks. Instead, he started involving in drugs...
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Line 5, column 394, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...e have everything we need in this life. Lets take this as an instance. Paul Pogba, a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 39.0 14.8657303371 262% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 83.0 33.0505617978 251% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2719.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 589.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61629881154 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46707356169 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468590831919 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 6.24550561798 336% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3899172878 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.7096774194 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67741935484 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113481875418 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346253154141 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395213966593 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0836626574773 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445487921783 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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