The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life does not to a greatest extent prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. there are many pros and cons of a luxurious life. On one hand, people may become lazy but on the other hand, they may try to sustain the wealth of their forefathers. this proves as an evidence to not only the contemporary world but also to the ancient times when we were ruled by the kings.
In the olden days, the occupation of the father was passed on to their sons. if carpenter's son would become a carpenter, a weaver's son would become a weaver, a farmer's son would become a farmer and so on. but nowadays, education has become a mandatory one for all and hence every individual all over the world are given a chance to take a careeer of his/ her wish. thus, with the increase in the level of education and the significant rise in the number of graduates every year, there is a huge opening of job markets to suit the needs of evry employee. hence, every human being has enough assets to enjoy the comforts of the world.
further, when we look at the pattern of study of students, it could be noted that they are more prone to the technologies rather than textbook study. if asked about their future, they reply that they want to pursue a career in photography, racing, sports or become entrepreneurs rather than doctor, teacher or an engineer. The comfort and luxury had made them inactive and less hardworking. At the same time, they do work towards earning a better means of livelihood and to continue with their posh life.
For instance, the latest advancements in the fiels of robotics and Artificial intelligence would not have grown without the critical thinking of the strong and independent individual. Zuckerberg would not have been able to create facebook had he abided by the rules of his university to stop the networking site for which he is now famous.
nowadays kids want the luxury and comfort at home. this has only led to advances like online banking, online stores and supermarket, robots to clean our homes and so so on. With the increase in the comfort level, there is a rapid increase in the advancement of technology and children are growing to be more independent with varied thought processes which necessitates whatever is essential for them.
thus, from the above examples and instances, it could be concluded that eventhoughluxuries and conveniences are ample, it does not lead to the hindrance of human mind and soul. Everyday is a beginning to fresh ideas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Luxuries
luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life d...
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Suggestion: the
...iences of contemporary life does not to a greatest extent prevent people from dev...
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...uly strong and independent individuals. there are many pros and cons of a luxurious l...
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...ustain the wealth of their forefathers. this proves as an evidence to not only the c...
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Suggestion: If
...the father was passed on to their sons. if carpenters son would become a carpenter...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'weavers'' or 'weaver's'?
Suggestion: weavers'; weaver's
...penters son would become a carpenter, a weavers son would become a weaver, a farmers so...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'farmers'' or 'farmer's'?
Suggestion: farmers'; farmer's
... a weavers son would become a weaver, a farmers son would become a farmer and so on. bu...
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...nce to take a careeer of his/ her wish. thus, with the increase in the level of educ...
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...s to enjoy the comforts of the world. further, when we look at the pattern of study o...
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...echnologies rather than textbook study. if asked about their future, they reply th...
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...ds want the luxury and comfort at home. this has only led to advances like online ba...
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Suggestion: Thus
...tes whatever is essential for them. thus, from the above examples and instances,...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...o the hindrance of human mind and soul. Everyday is a beginning to fresh ideas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, so, thus, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 442.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77828054299 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72769623944 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549773755656 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4935918343 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.6 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1574284728 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483300920766 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100661779314 0.0758088955206 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0779246458217 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826422305601 0.0667264976115 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.