Man and women have different intrinsic capacity, so they differ from each other in the suitability of doing some task.
What are the features needed to show a pertinency to a task? This is highly subjective question, some may regard labor to be a factor, some may regard skills to be a factor or some may regard shrewdness as the most important factor. However, it is unanimous that, the degree of success to complete a specific task, shows how appropriately someone, is suited to perform the task. So, in my opinion, the intrinsic physical differences between men and women, in no way, can make any of them suitable to perform a specific task. I completely disagree with the given claim and would like to elucidate my view, on the basis of the below two examples.
Twenty-first century, is clear-cut platform to demonstrate the above stated claim. For instances, may of the "tasks", that were considered gender biased, in the past, are now rapidly being performed by both male and female. For instance, let us take the field of medicine. In the past, nursing was considered a prerogative of women; the job required taking care of injured, diseased patients and women were thought to have innate solicitous nature than that of men. Alternately, the profession of doctor was more pursued by males, mainly because of the social belief, that male were more "macho" for that job, involving blood works. This created a social barrier, in which a son was raised to be a doctor and a daughter to be a nurse. However, the conditions are not as such today. many females are pursuing their job of being doctor and males are enrolled in nursing schools. It is true that such male nurses are looked at with a feeling of askance, by some conservationist, but it is without doubt, that they are performing with the same level of efficiency as compared to their female counterparts. So, is the condition of female doctors. This shows that, in spite of lacking inborn characters, both female and male can perform the same job with equal efficiency, provided that they are given proper training and skill development.
Similarly, let us consider a field, which was considered suitable only for male in the past, but now it is open to females also. One of the most easily seen examples of such field is, field of industrial works. Such works are mainly regarded to be more painstaking and requiring the dedication of more effort. Of course, it is hard to exert huge amount of labour and sweat, all day in the factory, and it is even harder for women to do so. This was the prime belief of the society in the past and the recruitment of women workers in such factories, was considered a loss in the labor force. But, it clearly evident that the tables have completely turned now, with the advancement in technologies, such "laborious" job, are now easily performed by a click of a button. With proper training and skill development, any person can work in any type of industries, no matter how much labor force the job demands. This shows that, with the advancement in technology, the intrinsic qualities. previously absent in women are easily compensated, making them equally suitable for the job.
Of course, some may still raise the point that, still there are some jobs, which are restricted to a particular gender masonry works for male, cleaning works for female. However, it should be accepted that such barriers are presented only because of our conservative, conventional thinkings, and the malicious desire to rip the benefits from others effort. If we ignore such constraints, we will see that such barriers do not hold water.
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also, but, first, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, still, for instance, of course, in my opinion, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.5258426966 215% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2942.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 602.0 442.535393258 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88704318937 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86742336492 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 925.2 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.38483146067 296% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.210272142 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.071428571 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53571428571 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15821913415 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388982102612 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048284003659 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982267713408 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440821366728 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 100.480337079 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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