Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? When people succeed, it is entirely because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with their success. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
It is said by someone that success comes after many failures. Some people think that success is all about hard work while others believe that it depends on luck. From my vantage point, I totally agree that success is due to hard work. I think so due to several reasons which I will explore in the following essay. I think so for plethora of reasons which I will explore in subsequent paragraphs. I hold this opinion for a plethora of reasons which I will delineate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, many people know the story behind their success. They have experienced many sleepless nights to overcome the success the failure. My own experience has been compelling example of it. I was studying for National Board exams of Dentistry to get my license in Canada. It was really tough for me to study as I was working as Dental Assistant in a dental clinic. I read day and night whenever I got the chance studying while travelling in the bus or walking on the side walks from Ipad. I had literally worked hard to clear this exam. After the result, I came to know my whole journey of six months studies that all the hard work done paid off at the end. If I had depended on my luck and gave up all my efforts, the may be I still may not have my Dental license. So, by this experience we can see how hard work is the key to success.
Furthermore, hard work is the only key to success. Some people believe that it depends on luck which is totally false as they do not know how that success is achieved. They have never experienced the real efforts behind it. Let’s take an example of my friend Rohit. Rohit and I was studying in 12th grade together. In times of exams, he always tells me to sleep as he was totally dependent on luck. On contrary, I have always believed in my hard work and courage. So, at the end of the 12th grade when we both got result, I passed with flying colors while he failed in one subject which he had to repeat after six months again. This example, clearly shows that it is only the hard work which make a person successful.
(In conclusion, I agree that it is only on hard work which makes the person successful not only because they have experienced their journey with efforts but also it is dependent on hard work and not completely relying on luck. If we want to achieve any kind of success in our life then we must stop keeping it up to luck and start working hard for it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... will explore in subsequent paragraphs. I hold this opinion for a plethora of rea...
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...my luck and gave up all my efforts, the may be I still may not have my Dental license....
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Suggestion:
... luck and start working hard for it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, still, then, while, as to, i think, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1985.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37224669604 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34172359386 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45154185022 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9786266219 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5185185185 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8148148148 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59259259259 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221541636267 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631666402913 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533954632914 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1516682263 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415068376442 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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