Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
The contemporary world is getting increasingly diversified with people having different ideologies. This phenomenon triggered a plethora of conflicts between them and laws were once believed to be the resolution for these clashes. However, some people started to assert that laws are not sufficient enough to solve problems of modern society as they could not change people’s attitude. However, since there are some advantages that legal system has on public, I cannot completely agree with the argument.
Obviously, laws are established to ameliorate various problems in the society. However, they are just structural guidelines, and therefore, cannot guarantee the alteration of people’s minds. In other words, if people consider laws as discrete matters, they could be futile. These problem becomes evident with underdeveloped country or autocratic state. Take Africa as an example. Although International Labor Organization adopted the convention about elimination of child labor, there are more than thousands of children working harshly in Africa. For them, child-labor is directly related to their survival. It’s urgent for them to earn money, and thus, totally ignores and separates themselves from the convention. Moreover, international human right treaties have been adopted to ensure people’s basic right. However, there exists a number of state with abundant coercive and rigid power. These countries frequently repress and trample citizen’s right. Thus, as these examples shows, law itself could not ensure the change of people’s attitude.
That is not to say, however, that laws have no effect on human’s hearts at all. Even if it is not an instant change, legal system involves gradual shift for the majority of cases. This is because the existence of law itself raises public awareness about an issue pertaining to the law. If it had not been for the legislation, citizen could not have perceived those matter as a problem. Considering that awareness is the first step for a change of social perception, laws do have value definitely. Take civil rights act of 1964 as an example. This act prohibited discrimination based on race, religion and sex and emphasized the equality of people. It enabled citizens to be aware of the unrighteousness of the inequality and Americans are now, albeit incompletely, slowly changing. Moreover, Kyoto Protocol, an international treaty to force countries to reduce greenhouse gas emissions, is another appropriate instance. It could be hardly told that the Protocol itself was successful. However, it greatly contributed in increasing people’s concern about environmental issue. They now appreciate the gravity of environmental problem such as global warming and make effort to save the Earth. Therefore, legal system does definitely influence citizen’s attitude. What we have to take into consideration is the fact that the alteration of human’s mind requires long time, and thus, have to observe for long period.
To put in a nutshell, taking everything in consideration, it is partially agreeable with the statement that many disputes are unsolvable by laws as they could not influence people’s mind. Of course, some people ignore the law and behave they want. However, we could not overlook the role of law as it initiates the change.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, of course, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2839.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 512.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.544921875 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09094481014 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556640625 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 900.9 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.4599840429 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.0303030303 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5151515152 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227325843106 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508669010207 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540126907924 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149345325659 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709059350438 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 100.480337079 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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