Mass media and the internet have caused people’s attention spans to get shorter. However, the overall effect has been positive: while people are less able to focus on one thing, they more than make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what’s important.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Mass media and internet has had a very strong impact on our lives. It is only because of the evolving technology in these fields that carrying out our day-to-day jobs has become so much convenient. The prompt suggests that due to mass media and internet our attention span has been shortened but our ability to access large volume of information has increased. I disagree with this, mainly because of two reasons.
To begin, I do not believe that mass media or internet has had any negative effect on our attention span. There is no solid evidence that proves this point. On the contrary I feel that certain aspects of the mass media actually help us in increasing our concentration levels. For instance, many researches have pointed out that playing video games can actually help us to improve concentration level, and it also helps us in decision making. There are also various puzzles available online which help us to exercise our mental abilities.
Further, I do not believe that people actually learn to sort huge amount of information, because they do not need to do so. The concept of internet is popular because, people can easily find what they are looking for. This method is very efficient and time saving. For example, one of the most popular search engines, 'Google' continuously works to make information readily available. For this certain 'buzz words' are used. The idea is to associate certain words to a web page, which describes it in the best way possible, so when those particular words are searched the most relevant data shows up.
In sum, I believe that mass media and internet have can provide various benefits if used in the right way. It does not have any major negative effects on our attention span, and the information is readily available if a person knows what he or she is looking for.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, look, so, for example, for instance, i feel, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 314.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83121019108 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53066911664 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550955414013 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9157055804 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.2352941176 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19890367652 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621448023276 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528220043657 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119189902796 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214279822674 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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