Most culture encourages individuals to sacrifice a large part of their personalities in order to be like other people. Thus, most people are afraid to think or behave differently because they do not want to be excluded.
Cultural norms and values always encourage conformity and it is true that most culture encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their personalities in order to maintain harmony in the society. However, I do not agree with the term that most people follow conformity or sacrifice their individuality in the fear of social persecution and social exclusion for the following reasons.
Every society has its own cultural norms, notions, belief and values and so it is true that each member of the society is forced to live under these social constraints in order to maintain social harmony. Any thought or actions against prevailing social trend would have a dire consequence. They are either punished or expelled from the society. For instance, in Islamic culture, unveiling the head of Islamic women in front of the stranger or a male person is a religious sin, and so Islamic women were forced to unveil their head while stepping out of their home. These women are subjected to harsh physical punishment by the family members if found transgressing this social boundary. However, modern Islamic women are now no longer afraid of social persecution and are not confined within the walls of this social conformity. Instead, they started unveiling their head and started pursuing their career in a way they want to. Now, we can find infinite number of models, actresses, singers and dancers females from Islamic community all around the world. Thus, social constraints no longer inhibit ones individuality.
Similarly, Ptolemaic geocentric theory regarding the solar system prevailed from second century to about sixteenth century. The contemporaneous Roman Catholic society has a wide held belief that god has put the earth at the centre of the solar system and nobody dare to go against god because of the fear of excruciating physical punishment by the church officials. However, Copernicus dare to explore the fact of heliocentric theory (sun is the centre of solar system). This theory was against the wide held belief of Roman Catholic and punished severely the follower of heliocentric theory. However, after hundreds of years of suppression, Galileo was able to gather sufficient evidences in favor of heliocentric theory and Copernicus is now regarded as the father of astronomy.
In the context of Nepali culture, menstrual exile was one of the menstrual taboos which prohibits Hindu female to enter inside their home during menstruating period considering them to be impure. They were banned from their house and were forced to live in a cattle shed or menstruating hut far from their house, posing a threat in their life. Similarly, untouchability was also one of the cultural taboos on the basis of low and high caste prevailed in Nepali culture not so far before a couple of years. However, as people became more and more educated, they became more aware about the social and cultural trends and started expressing the problems caused by such cultural trends. They has now banned such cultural trends like menstrual exile and untouchability moving against the prevailing cultural trend considering such trends being highly detrimental to the life of people.
In conclusion, it is no doubt that any culture encourages conformity in order to maintain social harmony in the society. However, humans are free to think, act and behave differently than other. Further, every human now are free to express their unique individuality despite social conformity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 754, Rule ID: AFRAID_OF_HEIGHT[2]
Message: The noun should be probably in the plural form: 'persecutions'.
Suggestion: persecutions
...omen are now no longer afraid of social persecution and are not confined within the walls o...
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Line 2, column 1102, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...s, social constraints no longer inhibit ones individuality. Similarly, Ptolemaic ge...
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Line 4, column 690, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...ms caused by such cultural trends. They has now banned such cultural trends like me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, regarding, second, similarly, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 58.6224719101 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2915.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 560.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20535714286 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77055801404 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483928571429 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 931.5 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6841200359 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.458333333 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243543218126 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591051367769 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712838092004 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140278297166 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10718119009 0.0667264976115 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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