"Most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue. But loyalty---whether to one's friends, to one's
school or place of employment, or to any institution---is all too often a destructive rather than a
positive force."
Loyalty and fidelity are one of those virtues that at times have been subjected to question and are debated til this date. The problem is engendered when the fine line between loyalty and fanaticism is blurred. Loyalty is an important virtue that is taught to most of us, is ultimately destructive rather than a positive force in our lives, is more of a polemical claim to be made. The difference between pledging fealty to someone or some instituition must not and should not be confused with loyalty and that loayalty as a virtue doesn't discourage or debilitate one's ability to question. I strongly beg to differ from the claim being made based on the following two reasons that are listed below.
Loyalty is the core of all relationships in this world. Relationships or human bonds are based on loyalty. Human's are convivial beings and require social interaction to thrive. Loyalty enables the profoundness of an interaction and ability of one self to truely express themselves in presence of fellow humans. For example we rely on a handful of our friends for emotional support and self expression. The loyalty in friendship gives rise to a sense of mutual trust which strengthens the bond of the friendship. It helps someone realize that he or she will have that loyal support in times of genuine need. Thus loyalty gives meaning to the relationship, here friendship is considered as an example.
Loyalty ensures professional success ans ease to a certain degree. In the fast paced world to develop an loyal working relationship with colleagues and superiors and adhering to it is beneficial as well as rewarding. If for example your superior needs some important work that needs to be done by someone under his commandship, you might land the job owing to your hardwork and dedication but what enabled the decision for you to land the job is "Loyalty". Based on one's past loyal and assiduos services one might be rightfully favoured for important jobs or responsibilities in highly competitive work culture and this a outstanding example where loyalty pays off.
Though one might argue that loyalty taken out of proportion and blinded by fanaticism might result into negative force. It might putatively result into promoting and justifying of wrongdoings and malevolence out of loyalty. For example one can out of loyalty towards his friends turn a blind eye to their delinquent friends who might be involved in activities like doing drugs. This is one of the salient reasons loyalty gets decried as an possible negative force that might have a negative impact over all. Though this fanaticsm and decadence of one's ability to judge the morality and ethics is ascribed to Loyalty it is simply a misrepresentation of the virtue in general. Loyalty as a virtue when imparted to someone doesn't imply blind faith or being zealots for any individual or instituition. It is the weakness of one's character that fails to discriminate between loyalty and fanaticism.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
...loyal support in times of genuine need. Thus loyalty gives meaning to the relationsh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, in general, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02226720648 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93069383969 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512145748988 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.097249725 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.375 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296838814465 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859077461819 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699425045439 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181425960908 0.150359130593 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729863457672 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.