The following appeared in a local newspaper People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold Away both popular over the counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor s prescription Each brand is accus | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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The following appeared in a local newspaper.
"People should not be misled by the advertising competition between Coldex and Cold-Away,
both popular over-the-counter cold medications that anyone can purchase without a doctor's
prescription. Each brand is accusing the other of causing some well-known, unwanted side
effect: Coldex is known to contribute to existing high blood pressure and Cold-Away is known
to cause drowsiness. But the choice should be clear for most health-conscious people:
Cold-Away has been on the market for much longer and is used by more hospitals than is
Coldex. Clearly, Cold-Away is more effective."

A local newspaper attempts to provide clarifications regarding to competing brands of a ober-the-counter cold medication, that were purportedly engaged in a recrimination. The author of the argument bases his arguments on fact that the availability of Cold-Away even before the competitor Coldex even existed in the market. Taking sides in a medical dispute that involves medications might be seriously harmful if the points made by the argument are not rational and cogent and people are misguided, which seems to be the here. The author of the article seems to have relied on three unwarranted assumptions that are listed below.
The brands are putatively known for the medical inadequacies or side effects of their over-the-counter cold medications. It is highly possible that the side effects that the individual medications of the two brands that are commonly known are based on the hyperbolic public assertions or word of the mouth that in reality are not so. This could lead to serious ramifications if one of the two medications are touted or discouraged for public use by an ecumenical source as a local newspaper, without proper information on the medications. The author must be hardlined to gather the facts about the side effects if any from the companies that manufacture the medications alogn with locan physicians who have been prescribing to their patients.
Something that is on the market for a longer time is by defaut reliable. Perhaps, the medication called Coldex or the manufaturing company didn't exist long before and Cold-Away was the only available option in the market. It is also possible that the Coldex has been a successful and in operation in other regions and markets and came into the this market where Cold-Away had a monopoly after assessing the monopoly and a suitable competition. It makes almost no sense as a reasoning to promote a particular product especially a medication based on its longevity in the market. This unwarranted assumption thus neglects other possible cases where Coldex might be a better and an efficient medication by virtue of its modernity and modern technological advancements in the health and drug development sector. Thus the author must not rely on the fact that Cold-Away has been in the market longer. Rather the author should assess whether Coldex is more efficient than Cold-Away based on the difference in technologies implemented in their production and how up-to-date the production techniques are.
Cold-Away's frequent use by hospitals justifies its reliability. Perhaps, the hospitals that make use of Cold-Away are bounded by contracts to do so. At times hospitals and clinics sign contracts with pharma companies to use their medications in return for reduced costing and similar monetary gains keeping in view the profit-making aspect of the hospital. It is possible that the proclivities for one particular drug is a result of adherence to such a legal binding. The author must refrain from such assumptions without enquiring the hospitals who use of this medication is cited in this article.
In conclusion, the unwarranted assumptions as discussed above renders the argument infirm. The author must gather information about the possible side effects of the medications from reliable sources and refrain from making assumptions based on the time duration for which the medications have been available on the market. Neither should the author consider the frequent usage of these medications by hospitals without inquiring about any legal bindings or reasons for their proclivities. If these clarifications are provided the author will be able to make a cogent case and accurately promote the right medication and not be innocuously misleading people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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...lled Coldex or the manufaturing company didnt exist long before and Cold-Away was the...
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...le that the Coldex has been a successful and in operation in other regions and ma...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
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Suggestion: the; this
...other regions and markets and came into the this market where Cold-Away had a monopoly a...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...the health and drug development sector. Thus the author must not rely on the fact th...
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Suggestion: Rather,
...old-Away has been in the market longer. Rather the author should assess whether Coldex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, thus, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 55.5748502994 149% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3143.0 2260.96107784 139% => OK
No of words: 594.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29124579125 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06087690904 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1012.5 705.55239521 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1553671378 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.958333333 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.20833333333 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207235366177 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659584787849 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481685465839 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123930880666 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383439795701 0.0628817314937 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 98.500998004 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, thus, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments