A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The primary education system is a vital component of every citizen’s upbringing. This schooling provides development of the mind, through memorizing essential facts within various fields of study, to critical thinking skills honed through certain activities and examinations. This process of education is an important step in developing a nation’s citizens to be congruent with that particular country’s societal mindset. Therefore, I am in agreement with the provided prompt that a nation should maintain a consistent curriculum throughout a student’s primary education, albeit with some certain limitations as elucidated in further paragraphs.
This policy of requiring students to all be exposed to a common curriculum until they enter college is an advantageous one. If all students in all states, such as the United States, are learning the same material as determined by the government it ensures that each child has been presented with a basic foundation required for either entering adulthood or continuing their education into a university. By allowing a nationalized curriculum it circumvents a particular state or community from commandeering these plans and using their own perhaps flawed or inadequate lessons. As an example of a possible educational failure by allowing more localized lesson planning one can look at the areas of a country that are more hyper religious. These areas have boards of education that have called for the elimination of the teaching of evolution to appease their citizenry. As the field of science has demonstrated, evolution is not some loosely debatable topic, but is instead a fact of nature. By allowing certain areas to design their own curriculum one can see how children could be denied exposure to some of the fundamental theories in such fields as biology. Thus, by maintaining a national curriculum that has been ensured for a complete worldview, students will have a better foundation for entering college or entering the workforce.
As mentioned in the opening paragraph there is certainly some caveats to allowing this national educational policy until students enter college. The danger of such a policy can come from a country that may not have the citizens’ best interest in mind when developing the education requirements. Look no further than the Asian peninsular country of North Korea. Their government certainly has a strong hold on the curriculum that is taught to the citizens. It teaches idolatry of its leader as well as hatred towards other countries such as The United States. The teachings are misguided and most certainly do not promote the wellbeing or needed educational developments of its citizens. This educational failure has contributed to a suppressed and impoverished nation.
As one can see the nuance of allowing a nation to require a standardized primary education has great benefits as long as that government has ensured a properly vetted and accurate lesson plan. Sure, small variances can be allowed such as allowing math teachers some leeway on whether to use Common Core methods or the more traditional ways without varying the final goals significantly. But, in conclusion the consequences of fully agreeing with the provided prompt must be weighed with its use within some rogue nations and the dangers that come from it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ow children could be denied exposure to some of the fundamental theories in such fields as ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... college or entering the workforce. As mentioned in the opening paragraph ther...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2813.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36832061069 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01867138011 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515267175573 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 896.4 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6294533984 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.863636364 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173513722843 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556782081805 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581275106716 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10552733108 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404954665022 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 100.480337079 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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