A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting you

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A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position

I mostly disagree with this recommendation for two reasons which I will elucidate below, but I do concede that the policy will enable students glean knowledge in areas that they might never have had opportunity to.
To begin with, a nation should not obligate its students to study the same national syllabus until admission into college because this will not give students the enthusiasm and solid foundation required to withstand challenges in their desired field of study that they might encounter in the institution. For instance, a student who is passionate about becoming a medical doctor and graduating with distinction but have no basic knowledge about health and hygiene will sure become perplex and looking like a stranger once he or she is been introduce to similar but advanced topics at the higher level. In addition, he or she might begin to struggle just to pass with “Grade D” and eventually end up with carryover(s) that might lead to academic imbalance and poor academic performance upon graduation. Thus, there is need to allow students at the lower level study different curriculums particularly syllabus that will prepare them for their profession.
Furthermore, the ability for students to discover their talents and potentials on time will be hampered because they will be in a state of confusion as regards the career path to follow. For instance, a student might decide to study Yoruba or fine art as a profession in college since he or she was taught this at the lower level. They will have no choice than to appreciate what they have learnt and even feel that is the best course of study for them. The way they will think and act will be circumscribe due to the lack of exposure to other syllabus.
On the contrary, studying the same national curriculum will enable students glean equal amount of knowledge and skills, and make them highly competitive as no one will be referred to as “better than the other”. In all, while a nation might consider this recommendation as the best for its students, it thus has it own flaws.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'introduced'.
Suggestion: introduced
... like a stranger once he or she is been introduce to similar but advanced topics at the ...
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Line 2, column 552, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nger once he or she is been introduce to similar but advanced topics at the highe...
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Message: Did you mean 'owns'?
Suggestion: owns
...e best for its students, it thus has it own flaws.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, while, as regards, for instance, in addition, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91977077364 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69000882647 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547277936963 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.1304745894 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.090909091 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7272727273 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3636363636 5.21951772744 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177935069153 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784199373317 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591583269297 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120235561621 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267198910512 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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