A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter into the college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In today's era, entire globe has become a big school. Many students travel from one country to another to aspire their career goals. But countries should make a fixed study paths until high schools so that students can understand the basic subjects and cultural as well as social values of the country. The above prompt emphasizes the same and I mostly agree on it because of two reasons. But there is some exception to the rule as far as today's employment patterns are concerned.
First of all, the national curriculum is the mirror of the basic fundamental subjects and principals, which are taught in the high school which are required for the students to sustain in the future. For instance, the basic subjects such as Physics, Mathematics,History and Chemistry should be part of the national curriculum regardless of the choices of students. Students can choose the electives for languages like French, Spanish,Sanskrit etc. on the basis of, which country of the world they are located in. Lets take an example of country China, Chinese language must be mandatory in their high schools regardless of the choices of students. Otherwise children will be unable to have a daily communication.
Secondly, I also reckon that all the students until they attend the high schools, they are not mature enough to understand their likes and dislikes. Students hardly think about their career goals and aspects in nearby future until they enter the collge. Hence, same national subjects should be mandatory for the students. Once they get into the college, they understand their choices of careers and feel motivated to pursue the careers which they want, considering the pros and cons of those paths. For example, the international celebrity Priyanka Chopra aspired to be an auronautical engineer in her childhood but eventually she ended settling up her career in cinema and entertainment industry. She got the absolutely terrific opportunities to grow in her career but entertainment career was certainly not in her mind until she was awarded as a Miss World during her school days.
Undoubtedly, a fixed curriculum must be compulsory for the students until they get into the collge. But I do concede that there may be differences in curriculums set by countries and many subjects which are mandatory in these curriculum should be revised once in a while because employment opportunities are declining nowadays considering mediocrity of the subjects, which are taught in the schools. Therefore, going forward, educators will need to make some changes in the national curriculum considering trends of educational paths and career opportunities.
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...ays employment patterns are concerned. First of all, the national curriculum is...
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...ematics,History and Chemistry should be part of the national curriculum regardless o...
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...tives for languages like French, Spanish,Sanskrit etc. on the basis of, which country of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20187793427 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91385573166 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6102872904 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237739531627 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750173504382 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644456068006 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147140211218 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421371708724 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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