A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It is always better for the nation to create a equitable environment for all the students in the nation and have the same curriculum for all the students. The prompt suggests that the nation should require all its students to have same curriculum until they enter college where they can choose the course according to their interest. In my opinion, I mostly agree to this statement and argue with 2 following points.
Firstly, due to the diverse ranges of boards of education in every single state has lead to a diverse range of education system and sperate policy for all the students. Some boards are internaltional, some of the state and some of the nation. All the students are studying different matters in their day to day life, the main issue with this is that it is uncommesurate for the students to be compared. For example, recently there was a state wide competition in maharashtra, the student with the highest marks in their academic were given scholarships. This was an amazing opportunity for the students who wanted to help their parents financially. The catch with this competition was that the student should be enrolled in the state board school. Now this rules out the students who are not studying in the school with state board. If there were a single national board for all the schools then this won't be a problem for all the students willing to participate in this competition. Now, if there are fewer boards the education planning time for all the states will dwindle. All the states education representative can come together and discuss what are the modifications they can make will help all the states. This in turn will also help the students for example, if there is a student in the state board he is less likely to learn coding according the curriculum, although his friends who are in international boards have high knowledge about the same. This issue won't arrise if there is a single cirriculum in the whole nation.
Secondly, the students should have a little knowledge about thier nations history. If the nation is making a single curriculum for all the students then the nation should teach them about the current ongoing modifications in the nation. The hardships the nation had to facce during the world war. How did the nation survive after the war, what were the path they took to reach at the current position. The students studying about all this will have a great idea about their nation. They will have their own opinion regarding their own nation. The students will be more interested in their own state and will respect it. After entering college the students can anyways decide the field of study they want to pursue.
In conclusion, all the students in the nation should be under the same national curriculum as this will help the nation to progress further. So the nation should have a single national curriculum until they enter college.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... always better for the nation to create a equitable environment for all the stude...
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Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...udents. Some boards are internaltional, some of the state and some of the nation. All the s...
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Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...e internaltional, some of the state and some of the nation. All the students are studying d...
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Line 3, column 1085, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'states'' or 'state's'?
Suggestion: states'; state's
...or all the states will dwindle. All the states education representative can come toget...
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Line 3, column 1336, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to code'.
Suggestion: to code
... state board he is less likely to learn coding according the curriculum, although his ...
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Line 5, column 621, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...in their own state and will respect it. After entering college the students can anywa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8370221328 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54964433006 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.408450704225 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7867123151 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.16 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.88 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290557480869 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108846527979 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785422615416 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25577704679 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762357512298 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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