A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
it goes without saying that in this sophisticated and ever-going era in which we live, education and the pedagogy have key roles in the future of generations and nations as well. people send their children to schools in order to be empowered with knowledge and science to obtain better opportunities in their future lives. In this regard, some people believe that it is necessary that all the students have an identical curriculum and learn the same thing before they get to college. In contrast, others refute this notion and claim that a national curriculum is not required and students should have different selections. I believe that a notional curriculum is a better solution, however, it may have some flaws. The reasons and examples to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
First, equality in education is a basis. While people should take part in the same university entrance exam, in iran called konkoor, they should have the same abilities and knowledge. In aneducation system as we have in iran, people have to enter konkoor exam to be qualified to enter universities and since we entering the governmental universities is a big challenge for students, they have to prepare for a national exam. students are ranked with their results in several courses and finally have the chance to opt which university to enroll. If there are different curriculum and different education then students can not be appraised with one exam and then universities should hold many different exams which is irrational and costly. however, since all the courses are not the materials of the konkoor, education system can create some differences in different regions and states with different culture and languages, to teach them their own local issues.
Moreover, as a nation with a broad ethnical and cultural diversity, people should converge to a point which makes the more united. Pre-college education and curriculum is the only chance to teach youngsters the acquired knowledge to live together in peace.we have many wars and conflicts in our history because of the ethnical and tribal differences. Whoever had the power started to fight with others to run his authority and culture. one hundred years ago, King Reza fight with all the tribes in iran and established a uniform educational system to teach all the people the same united culture and a national perspective to reach. The official language then announced to be Farsi and after that there is no conflicted and everybody live in peace. His decision rooted in a same national curriculum and public education which fostered the nest generation. however, all the local cultures should be respected and a key factor which is neglected is that we should present all the micro-cultures and ethnic beliefs in our curriculum too.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reasons I believe that for students of a country, a same national curriculum until they enter college is required but some point needs to be considered in order to improve the performance of the system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2589.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 499.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18837675351 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81926822067 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460921843687 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 833.4 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4727635872 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.45 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.95 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322439531833 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968924669464 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967762270717 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232710457808 0.150359130593 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752399434728 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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