TPO 49 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.Use specific reasons and examples.
It goes without asying that in this progressive and complicated era in which we live, happiness is of the main concerns of the humankind. People find their happiness through their communications and relationships with others, and it is why making friends is so essential for individuals. While some argue that t long lasting friendship with limited people is the key element to happiness, others stand on the other side, arguing that the ability to make new friends is more important. Personally speaking, I believe that a small number of friends for a long period of time is more important, and I will make my side more clear in the next pararaphs.
First, the quality of the relationships is outweighted the quantity. It is crystal clear that the value of the friendship is determined by the willingness of a guy to extened his sympathy to the other one and the closeness of people involved in the relationship. In other words, to what extent they are capable to devote their time, energy and attention to each other. While people are in need, they require a hand to solve their problems and stay out of that unpleasant situation, and since old friendship is based on trust and firm connections, an old friend would be there to help. In these cases we feel so happy to have such great friends who can count on them when in need. A personal example can drive this notion home. Three years ago, I was bankrupted and I had many awful troubles delaing with my clients. I owed lots of money and I had to borrow some to solve my problems. I had the ability to make many friends easiy and it had given me the confident that I was a successful and happy person who could count on many friends. But when I asked them to give me money all of them rejected me and just one of my old friends who knew me well was ready to lend me some in order to make me happy and bring me out of that terrible situation. In sum, I became confident that true friendship was the old one.
Second, having firm connections with reliable friends who accompny us in all the ups and downs of the life, gives us a pleasant sense of confidence which leads to a permanent happiness. Although most of the time, making new friends is fun and gives us new experiences and a sense of excitement, but they are temporary feelings which do not last long. Moreover, finding new friends needs spending lots of time to become familiar with and due to the fact that our time is limitied, there is not sufficient time available to know many different people well. As a consequent, we start to feel anxious and worry about how to communicate with new friends. For example, two years ago, me and four of my friends enrolled in a gym club whare was full of many new people with different characteristics. I tried to be in contact with them and make new friends, but since I had not known them ahead, gradually I felt as if I am getting nervous with their unfamiliar and unpredictable responses compared to my own friends. Therefore, I switched to my old friends and started to feel better again.
The quality of a friendship and the trust are two importants factors to make us happy, and these factors are found in old friends, however, they are small in number.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 522, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...nt. Personally speaking, I believe that a small number of friends for a long period of time is mo...
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Line 1, column 559, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...at a small number of friends for a long period of time is more important, and I will make my s...
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Line 5, column 528, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...s not sufficient time available to know many different people well. As a consequent, we start ...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: small
...found in old friends, however, they are small in number.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2641.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 583.0 407.700716846 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53001715266 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6472837913 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464837049743 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 807.3 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.2023792892 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.826086957 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.347826087 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304805609868 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836821337737 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669289716459 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197563933785 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803916935253 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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