TPO52 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this complicated and progressive world in which we are living, rules and laws play significant roles in organizing prosperous and successful societies. Conforming the regulations and following social values are vital tasks of every individual to make a better community and avoid chaos. In this regard, the young generation is not an exception so that they should obey the rules; however, some believe that today, societies anticipate youngsters following the rules too toughly. Personally speaking, I partly agree with this notion, and I will substantiate my idea with reasons and facts that are elaborated upon hereunder.
The competency and the ability of people should be appraised for taking part in social activities and acquiring legal privileges, not their age. Age restriction is obvious discrimination against young people in many social affairs. For instance, while there were some reasons -such as reducing road accidents and fatalities in car crashes- to pass a law to prohibit young people from driving until the age of eighteen, the advent of new technologies has solved the safety-related issues by producing safer vehicles and better infrastructures like roads. It is crystal clear that driving a car or riding a motorcycle requires learning many skills and having a driver license in order to guarantee less probable damages. However, there is a rigorous law which prohibits young people from having the right to obtain a driving license until the legitimate age. While the advancement of new technologies leads to safer cars and more convenient roads to drive in, the persistence of the policy-makers and the societies on maintaining on this strict rules which limit young people seems irrational and very severe. A personal example can drive this notion home. Six years ago, I started driving my father’s car when I was sixteen with such extreme skill that everybody praised me. Although I had much more abilities in driving compared with my mother, who was already a legal driver, I had no right to get my driving license, and that was utterly unfair and strict.
On the other side, young people are not mature enough to make decisions logically; therefore, they often tend to make emotional decisions with a higher degree of risks. As people grow older, they become more prudent and avoid unnecessary risks and threats. In contrast, younger people extremely tend to do more adventurous actions and also, standing against social laws and mandatory regulations gives them a sense of independent and self-confident. Thus, committing social crimes is prevalent through the young generation than the elderly. Dealing drug, driving while drunk, and street fighting are some instances of youngsters’ crimes that can be highly controlled by passing strict laws and obligations. A recent study at Toronto University showed a close correlation between youth crimes and strict laws. They had investigated one hundred boys and girls in two different quarters in the city to find whether the strict applying laws is effective in the reduction of juvenile crime or not. In one site, a police stand was installed to make young people aware that everything is under control, and the other site was free of and external controlling power. After a month, a remarkable drop in the numbers of criminal acts among young people was reported in the first area, which means that applying severe laws helps to reduce crimes.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2925.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24193548387 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8259284919 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 315.0 212.727598566 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564516129032 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 908.1 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6268453569 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.954545455 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3636363636 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181927112291 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496276652845 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405073847377 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128604828819 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461515636201 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 86.8835125448 183% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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