A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Globalization, income disparity among citizens and immigrants are trends that make it hard to maintain a country unified. There are heated conflicts on every issues between people with different backgrounds: race, religion, political predilection, etc. It is often assumed that therefore a same curriculum will allay this problem. Moreover, the proponents of such policy argue that the efficiency of the nation's education will improve, since there will be less costs to educate young students as a whole. However, though their point is valid in some perspective, too rigidly unified curriculums would give a birth to various troubles.
There are students who get disadvantaged from the rigidly unified national curriculum. Those are first students who will be sacrificed by a unified curriculum. Historically, there have always been the prodigious who require special treatment to fully brandish its talents. Thomas Edison, for instance, suffered from his lack of reading skills during his secondary school life, chastised by teachers as 'retarded,' but his true ability started to shine thanks to his mother's incessant attention to him; he eventually contributed America by inventing electronic devices. If his mother had turned her back to him and let the official curriculum do all the cares, he would not have been able to become the most important inventor in the 20th century. Other than those genius who bloom late, others demand special treatments from the very beginning of the education stages. Recall how von Neumann completed secondary-level education levels when he was 7, and how Picasso disregarded nations' art curriculum and started his own works, which remain as masterpieces until now.
These examples indicate that though expensive, fine-tuned curriculum would enhance students' understanding of education objective. Yes, per capita cost of nationwide curriculum is cheaper than that attuned to each student. However, there is a thing to be closely treated; the unified national curriculum will incur more costs in the end. This is because, without considering different developments of different students, it is easy for them to give up studying at a certain level, no matter how the government elaborates it. In Korea, about two thirds of high school students are called as 'those who gave up math,' literally, they do not care about mathematics scores. They completely ignores math classes and focus on other subjects such as English, Korean, or geography. This is because the administration of education in Korea put the math standards too high for students: they have to learn trigonometry equations, integrals, derivatives, and vectors and geometry when they are sophomore. Those are so difficult for them to digest them so they simply give up to study them. Similar problems would occur, even if the administration lower the math education objective: the smart students will not study anyway.
These are not the only disadvantages of unified curriculum; there are potential threat of misuse in a unified national curriculum. If not rightly used, a unique education steps may degenerate the diversity of perspective, which will make the country vulnerable to the appearance of a dictator. Since education shapes young citizen's mind, if a sovereign wants to perpetuate its term than the first thing it tackles is controlling the education scheme. See how North Korea manipulated its citizen's perspective toward the world by distorting the 'unified curriculum'; it is uniformly filled with eulogy to three consecutive autocratic leaderships: Ilsung Kim, Jungil Kim, and Jongun Kim. If there had been an independent education agency which does not adopt such curriculum, people there might have not been brainwashed to praise their communist party and the leader all the time.
It is easy to assume that a unified curriculum would be efficient way to raise our next generation. However, less cost does not directly mean effectiveness. Considering its shortcomings, one should be at least careful in adopting it, take all of implicit costs described above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...policy argue that the efficiency of the nations education will improve, since there wil...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun costs is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ation will improve, since there will be less costs to educate young students as a wh...
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Message: Did you mean 'this genius' or 'those genii', 'those geniuses'?
Suggestion: this genius; those genii; those geniuses
...nventor in the 20th century. Other than those genius who bloom late, others demand special t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...which remain as masterpieces until now. These examples indicate that though exp...
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...orates it. In Korea, about two thirds of high school students are called as those...
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Message: The pronoun 'They' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'ignore'
Suggestion: ignore
...out mathematics scores. They completely ignores math classes and focus on other subject...
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...e smart students will not study anyway. These are not the only disadvantages of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, at least, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3446.0 2235.4752809 154% => OK
No of words: 637.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40973312402 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02382911018 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93593799601 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 356.0 215.323595506 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558869701727 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 1093.5 704.065955056 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3989316499 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.827586207 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9655172414 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75862068966 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181530935278 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472073451849 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300153098777 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970766840747 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230028461844 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 184.0 100.480337079 183% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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