A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The education system is the backbone that determines the growth of a country. The children of a nation are its future and how they are tought plays an important role in how the nation will evolve. Therefore, it is vital to decide how we should teach the next generation of workers and thinkers and to what extent their education should be the same.
All children need to know the essential knowledge base that is necessary to live in the modern world. Math, physics, chemistery, biology, social sciences, litriture and art are all elements that every person comes across in his life and therefore it is a must for all children to learn about these different subjects. In order to achieve this goal a common curriculum is needed to garauntee this happening. In addition, because there are a lot of differences between school systems in different parts of a country with different access to source material and equipment, having a common curriculum can ease the path for every child to obtain the same education regarding these subjects. As an example let’s consider two different schools. One is located in the capital city of a country with lots of tools at its disposal and the other is located in an urban town where the money for the school is scarce and they do not have the same equipment as the first school. A common curriculum that is inforced by the government ensures that both these school have the minimum requirments for the children to receive the basic education they need and that is a big advantage of a common curriculum.
However, by a certain age the children have know grown to be teenagers and they are at that age when they have to start thinking as individuals and decide on the path they want to take in life. The ideal circumstances at this stage is that the children have already learned what they need to learn and now they get to use that knowledge and their own personal experiences to draw themselves a rough sketch of what they want to do with their lives. Here studying the same curriculum could prove disadvantageous because the children often choose different paths and passions and therefore forcing them to study the same subjects will hinder their journey to reliaze their individual potentials. For example imagine two students with differen family background. One comes from a family of engineers and the other comes from a family of musicians. There are different influences driving these children. The first one decides to become an engineer or a scholar and the other chooses to follow his passion for music. If the two have to study the same curriculum they cannot investigate their interest fully because no common education program can facilitate both these areas togheter. Therefore In my opinion a commun curriculum at this stage will prove disadvantageous to the children.
Another aspect that should be considered is the geographic differences in a country. Different places and different cultures require different education systems at some point and I think that this should happen at the highschool level. Depending on where you live there are different aspects like religion, social culture and work skills that people need to learn in order to live in those locations. Having the same curriculum again can be disadvantageous if it limits the students education and does not allow them to study the subjects they need for the part of country they live in. For example compare a two part of the country where one is known for agriculture and the other is known for mining. The students in the first location need to learn more about agriculture and nature. They need to learn how the agriculture industry works and they need to be able to look further into it. On the other hand, the students in the second location might be more interested in the mining industry. The migh want to learn about different rocks and minerals which is a different discipline than agriculture. Having a common curriculum when students decide to learn different things does not help their education.
To summarize, a common national curriculum is necessary for children to learn the basic knowledge they need in order to be able to decide what they want to do with their lives. But when they reach that point they need to have the freedom to choose what to learn and this stage comes a couple of years before colledge. Therefore I don’t fully agree with the recommendation. I think it is better to stop the common curriculum a few years before college so students can investigate their interests before they enter higher education system. If such a system would be put in place it might ensure prosperous lives for every child.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: students'; student's
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.4196629213 217% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 33.0505617978 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 58.6224719101 177% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3886.0 2235.4752809 174% => OK
No of words: 797.0 442.535393258 180% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87578419072 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.31330296774 4.55969084622 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64642092562 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 317.0 215.323595506 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.39774153074 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1231.2 704.065955056 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8842000288 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.294117647 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4411764706 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08823529412 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196432269635 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524147965057 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358605586366 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123718516388 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121965262571 0.0667264976115 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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