a nation should require all of its students to study same national curriculum until they enter college.
Although a nation and its people have many common shared values and goals,there are various groups in the citizenry of a nation that differ in ideologies and interests. Considering this, a nation may require all of its students to study the same curriculum to some extent, however, the curriculum should not overstep the lines of shared national interests and tread path in the unchartered territories of diverse and conflicting ideologies and interests. Besides, there should be scopes and opportunities to establish educational institutions and study subjects outside of the national curriculum so that people may preserve their perceived identity without facing the troubled questions of national loyalty.
To elaborate on the statement presented in the introductory paragraph, let us first delineate and define the boundary of shared national interests and values. Throughout history there are some goals people have when they join a nation or become part of that nation. Primarily those goals, interests or values are safety of life and property, economic development and freedom to nurture one's self. In this context, nations establish state institutions and write laws and regulations that ensure public safety, an environment for economic development of the citizenry and an atmosphere of freedom and liberty. More or less, a vast majority of the citizens agree to this context, and are aware that they need to abide by the laws of the state and be productive to contribute to economic development of the nation. Therefore, a national curriculum, that is designed so that the new generation can learn basic skills to contribute productively to the wellbeing of the nation and play the role of the responsible and law abiding citizens to ensure an overall surrounding of public safety, is an asset to the nation.
However, the goals of public safety and wellbeing may not be achieved rather will be deteriorated if the national curriculum forces upon the diverse segments of the citizens ideas and values that are contradictory to their declared identity. For example, although all the people should learn the official languages of the sate, however, they should also be given adequate opportunities to learn and nurture their own mother tongue. Similar can be said about other aspects of cultures of different ethnicities of a nation. Moreover, religious or cultural ideologies of the majority should not be forced upon the minority in the name of national curriculum in any way which may even result in civil war and disintegration of the nation itself.
Hence, it is recommended that national curriculum consisting of shared goals and interests of the people should be taught to all of the students keeping sufficient spaces of dissent for the divergent ideologies and interests of the various subgroups present in the nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29646017699 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91967342566 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45796460177 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.2723704088 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.0 118.986275619 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2857142857 23.4991977007 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.71428571429 5.21951772744 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390424604079 0.243740707755 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145281124504 0.0831039109588 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967351163093 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256927237587 0.150359130593 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890864954783 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.7 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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