A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
The future of a country depends on education. It is always an important issue to ensure the equality and effectiveness. Some people suggest that all the students in a nation should be required to learn the same national curriculum until they enter college.
A glance on the statement, its good intentions are obvious. Uniform national curriculum before university may facilitate the educational equality. Studying in famous universities may be fatal to our life; it is an excellent chance for students from poor families to have a better future. In China, in order to enter high ranking universities, students need to compete in the same college entrance examination. If students do not take the same national curriculum, it will be hard to ensure the equality of this competition. To some extent, it is a good way to alleviate the class solidification, which will mitigate class contradiction and thus benefit the social stability.
Besides, the same curriculum may be beneficial to the communication and understanding of different nations of a country. As we all konw, conflicts among nations usually come from different cultural backgroud. By studying the uniform curriculum, students from different nations who will be the major group of the society will understand each other better. In China, students from 56 nations need to learn Chinese and the history of China. When people from different nations get together, we can chat with each other in Chinese, and we can also be more tolerent with each other because we are familiar with each other's culture. With more communication and understanding, China will be a more harmonious and stable country.
However, it is unrealistic to simply carry it out regardless of the actual situations. The suggestion in the statement ignores the differences of areas and students. As we all know, the overall level of education depends on its economy which means teaching resources, so it is unfair for students in less developed areas to compete with those in more developed areas. One of my classmate who comes from an less developed northwest area, Qinghai Province, could not catch up with my other classmates who are from the much more developed middle and eastern coastal areas even if she studied hard. In addition, even students in the same area have individual differeces; some students somehow have a gift on study and some students are podigies in other fields like art or music. If these students are all required to finish the uniform national curriculum, it is a kind of waste for the country.
Furthermore, would it be a kind of cultural invasion for these national minorities if they are required to study the curriculum designed for the majorities. Not only will it do harm to the preservation of precious cultutal traditions, but also may aggravate the protest of some national minorities. For example, if Chinese government requires all the nations to finish the same curriculum, some minorities like the Tibetan independence, may take the advanyage of this policy to split China. What's worse, the cultural traditions of the Tibetan may disappear, and it is unfair to local students to compete with students from other area.
Instead, I would like to propose an alternative plan that some basic courses can be same and optional courses are the complementary. For instance, in China each province has its own curriculum. Of course, all provinces share some basic subjects like Chinese and math though there are still some differences. Subjects like English will have a huge distinction between cities along eastern coast and other cities. Besides, students who are interested in art and music and going to work on these fields can choose another curriculum specially designed for them. So it can ensure the relative fairness with differences of areas and individuals taken into consideration.
To sum up, while this statement has its own good intentions, it is not realistic. An alternative plan may be better to achieve its goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, of course, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 58.6224719101 160% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3369.0 2235.4752809 151% => OK
No of words: 652.0 442.535393258 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16717791411 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05314661074 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90831964195 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447852760736 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1087.2 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4075167985 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.090909091 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7575757576 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57575757576 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37349339327 0.243740707755 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982891043237 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117099019545 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206339259193 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118412049739 0.0667264976115 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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