Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Since compared with the advertisements in the past, advertisements nowadays are less honest, so they are not useful for customers as they make a decision to buy.
Business competition is common in economy. Every company have to earn enough money that can maintain the basis operation of company. So advertisement is a beneficial way for corporation to appeal people to buy their product. Advertisement have beautiful image, attractive language, even celebrity that people love in specific area. However, nowadays, some people consider adverts are less honest than before so people cannot make correct decision for whether to buy this stuff. In my opinion, with the development of life’s quality, current advertisement is more real.
Firstly, all the people are able to evaluate object online, so the merchant cannot deceive the authenticity of this product. Nowadays, we have lots of application, such as Amazon, Taobao, which help people to buy things online. And every product have the comment area that people could discuss whether this thing good or bad, useful or not. So if company exaggerate their product and induce the dissatisfy of consumer, no one will buy it. Taking me as a example, I want to buy facial mask online. There are lots of company that use fascinating advertisement to introduce the function of their mask. I can’t decide which one is suitable for me so I open the comment area. If I see some people said this mask is unmatched what the advertisement shows, I won’t buy it. Also, I notice the more people critics the product, the less people buy it. For this reason, company have to use honest advertisement, so they have more customers.
In addition, now company have many form to demonstrate their product because of competition with each company. They not only put advertisement on the TV or Phone, but also use launch event to recommend their product. In this way, people could realize the function, appearance, authenticity of product closer before they buy it. For example, APPLE is one of the most popular technical corporation in the world. Before they publish every iPhone and computer, they prepare a big presentation for people who want to buy it. They introduce and show the new function of product and let people trust this company. That’s why people will buy. In the contrast, some companies that do not show people and don’t have demonstration to attract people to buy maybe is unreliable.
In the end, for these reasons, I think current advertisement is more honest than the past and let people to Manley a decision to buy.
Comments
The structure and content of…
The structure and content of the article are incomparable!
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: has
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
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...sumer, no one will buy it. Taking me as a example, I want to buy facial mask onli...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...he more people critics the product, the less people buy it. For this reason, company...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, for example, i think, in addition, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05955334988 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81343403899 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48635235732 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0752756457 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.56 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.12 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237058677114 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759967366423 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546658158502 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17969612173 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022252974344 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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