Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Fourth mass extinction is on the brink. Whole planet is suffering from the scourges brought about by climate induced disasters. Scientists are warning the dire consequences that will be caused by habitat loss, deforestation and various natural mayhem. In this context, saving the nature should be the first priority rather than any economic gain.
It is human tendency to move towards economic prosperity. In this twenty-first century when the nature of economy demands never-ending growth, exploiting nature for the economic gain has become a norm. For instance, swaths of Amazon forest in Brazil are being burned down to meet the growing demand soya bean and beef. Similarly in Nepal, many rivers even in remote parts are being mined for sand and gravels for the construction purpose. However, the government in these countries has turned blind eye to these activities that has spurred myriad of natural hazards. Burning of the Amazon, for example, is estimated to release huge amount of carbon exacerbating the human induced climate change and the loss of habitat of many species of plant and animal caused by burning may render them extinct disrupting the biological system.
At present, land area about 22 football fields is being deforested in every second which is very likely to make wild areas and species residing in these area very rare in the future. Moreover, the lack of habitat caused by the inability to protect wilderness areas will make wild animals encroach the human settlements causing large amount of property and life losses. In the southern part of Nepal, many communities are very vulnerable to the attack of wild animals. It is nothing new, for instance, for most of the community to be attacked by wild elephants and tigers. So it is mandatory to forsake any economic benefit and pass laws to protect the wilderness areas to protect local community, plants and animal species and ultimately the planet.
And it is not that we are losing economic benefit totally if we are leaving wilderness area in their natural state without exploiting them for the development purpose. Instead we can easily benefit from these protected wilderness areas directly or indirectly. Directly we can earn ample of amount of money from the tourist who can visit these areas to see the natural beauty. Similarly, such areas can elicit abundant amount of research personnel from the foreign country that can also aid in economic gain from the area. Indirectly we are saving abundant amount of money that government would have to spend for preventing the wild animals attack or any natural disasters that destruction of these areas could have invited. Finally we are living in the era, when environment should be given, if not more, equal priority to economy and make efforts to protect wilderness areas rather than exploiting them for economic gain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t is suffering from the scourges brought about by climate induced disasters. Scie...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... the growing demand soya bean and beef. Similarly in Nepal, many rivers even in remote pa...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'these areas'?
Suggestion: this area; these areas
...make wild areas and species residing in these area very rare in the future. Moreover, the ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...iting them for the development purpose. Instead we can easily benefit from these protec...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...tion of these areas could have invited. Finally we are living in the era, when environm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, similarly, so, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11752136752 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55747987322 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504273504274 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1082076656 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.047619048 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409638164064 0.243740707755 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110260917034 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753221983641 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220181304734 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743779410573 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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