Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Wilderness areas as in forests play a very important role in the lives of the living beings. Every animal depends on the trees for numerous reasons. But day by day the amount of these areas are being decreased at an alarming rate. People are cutting down trees every now and then thinking about their own benefits but ultimately causing great harm to all the living things on the planet. The reasons behind deforestation is mostly man made which is difficult to stop without having a strong law passed on. So i strongly agree with the statement here for two reasons in particular.
Firstly the most important purpose trees serve for the living things is with oxygen. Unlike other living beings, tree takes carbon-dioxide and exhales oxygen which is the only source of oxygen for the other living beings' breathing. We breathe in the air, of which, oxygen is a vital element. There should be a certain amount of oxygen in the air of an area for a healthy life. Cutting down trees may cause a decrease in oxygen in the air which may lead to a number of respiratory diseases. According to research, there should be 25% area covered with trees for a healthy environment. However, instead of reaching the goal percentage of the requirement, most of the countries have even failed to preserve the amount they possessed earlier as they do not have definite laws regarding this issue. For example, Bangladesh had 13 percent area of forest in the last decade which has decreased to a value of 9 percent only now.
Again, the roots of the tree makes the soil stronger which actually saves the land from natural calamities such as flood, cyclones, tornado etc. One recent Cyclone named "bulbul" was formed in the bay of Bengal area which was even larger than some countries, having the force to cause a historical damage. But the mangrove area worked as a shield to that cyclone and reduced the amount of possible losses at a great extend. Furthermore, the other living things are also contingent upon the trees for food and many other reasons as well. Only trees can independently produce their food through the process of photosynthesis. The other animals just live depending on trees for food directly or indirectly. A reduction in the amount of trees will cause famine to break out and there will be chaos among the living things.
It may primarily seem that wilderness areas can be protected by only depending on our goodwill, but situation does not indicate such thing. Recently Amazon, the biggest rainforest considered as the lungs of the planet was set on fire deliberately by some people concerned about their own benefit. If strict rules are not published to preserve forests soon, such incident may continue to occur causing an ultimate, irreparable damage to the planet. In conclusion, as forest is important to us not for a single reason rather than it is important for a numerous reasons, nations should be concerned to pass laws to preserve it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...ing rate. People are cutting down trees every now and then thinking about their own benefits but u...
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Line 9, column 296, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'historical damage'.
Suggestion: historical damage
...me countries, having the force to cause a historical damage. But the mangrove area worked as a shie...
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Line 13, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es are not published to preserve forests soon, such incident may continue to occu...
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Line 13, column 561, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'reason'?
Suggestion: reason
...her than it is important for a numerous reasons, nations should be concerned to pass la...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, in particular, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2467.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86587771203 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63395077853 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522682445759 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6165974679 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.68 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.28 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.12 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23366887423 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069548811686 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049369290016 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154196477385 0.150359130593 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268162119179 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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