Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In time of strife when the nation is struggling finacially, the citizens are the people who become most affected. The argument presented states that nations should eliminate government fundings for the arts when there are citizens who are unemployed or hungry. I strongly agree with this position due to the serious implications poverty has on the well- being of humans. The art industry does not provide citizens with the adequate means to survive. Additionally, school children would benfit more by being able to have a meal at shcool rather than be able to participate in school art programs.
Poeple in every nation need food to survive and they require money to buy that food.Pouring thousands if not millions of dollars into art programs will not feed those people.For example, in the Hollywood industry millions of dollars are spent to make one single film, and depending on the popularity of that film it will make millions of dollars, most of which goes to the actors and studio. What if that amount of money would instead go to feeding the poor and providing housing for the homeless in the U.S.? The basic needs of those people will be met and therefore contribute to their well-being.
Some might argue that suspending funding for the arts might eliminate art programs for school children. However, does their ability to play an instrument or go to dance class trump over their right to have have a meal at school and at home. For example, recently in a state in the U.S, a school district was planning to implement a policy in which children who own large amount of lunch debt would not be able to eat lunch and instead would be given a peanut butter and jelly sandwich with a water. In this case providing children with food to eat while in school where they sepnt more than half of their day is more important than letting them keeep the ability to play an instrument for the school band. By investing that money to provide chidlren with adequate and healthy food, they will have their needs met in a time of hunger and poverty.
There is much to conider when a nation has many citizens who are out of jobs and struggling. Suspending government funding for the arts would be a great place to begin placing resources where they are needed. The art of making movies is a billion dollar industry which if used towards providing housing for the homeless and needy, could greatly benefit the citizens of the nation. Even in this day in age children and their family can't afford to pay for school lunch, therefore, allocating funding for art to our schools will also benefit and contribute to the well-being of the future citizens of this nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'implications'' or 'implication's'?
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...ousing for the homeless in the U.S.? The basic needs of those people will be met ...
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...o dance class trump over their right to have have a meal at school and at home. For examp...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75646551724 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43891540965 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469827586207 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3050243916 60.3974514979 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.823529412 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2941176471 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70588235294 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213524459755 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815438951541 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527273336173 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145553010986 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565696553668 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.8420337079 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.