No one can possibly achieve success in the world by conforming to conventional practices and
conventional ways of thinking.
The linking of success with following conventional practices and conventional ways can be contentious one. To be successful has different connotations, let’s say a person think he might be successful if make his family live happily, for a scientist a success may be when figure out some breaking technology that can save some species or help in efficiency of humans etc. Thus depending on the person’s notion of what success means, he might follow conventional approaches or go against conventions to find a way to get success that he want to achieve. Thus I strongly disagree with author’s statement because it applies to all persons and as mentioned there can be instances in which success can be achieved by following non conventional practices.
Firstly, person trying to achieve success depends on many factors like the work he is performing is it something that no one has performed before or it is just a regular procedure that has to be done correctly. For example consider a scientist trying to find a cure to some rare disease and no one was still able to figure out let’s say any information about it, then the scientist has think out of box, he need to think in a sense that no one has ever thought before and that may lead to a successful cure. Thus in this scenario the scientist achieved success when he followed unconventional practices. Similarly, lets say a person preparing for a government examination. He starts preparing exam by following conventional practices reason being he has seen a number of other person who cracked the exam i.e achieved success by following these conventions or guidelines. Thus as mention to follow or not follow conventions depends on the person, what he whats to achieve and number of other reasons. Therefore I oppose that authors notion of no one can achieve success by not following conventional practices.
Furthermore, Who decides conventions? The conventions are set long back in different aspects when people as that time found following such mechanisms lead to success.Even these these conventions are being changed or adopted themselves based no new discoveries and inventions made in respective fields. Thus if some one is working on a concept that has not conventions, when whatever work he is doing is like going against conventions. If he leads to success then the unconventional practices he adopted are later converted to conventions to be followed and later if someone again finds new aspects about this concept this conventions are changed. Thus we can going further even say that conventions in first place are decided by the unconventional practices.
Concluding, Even thought there can be argument that give example of cases where success is achieved by following conventional practices, as discussed there are ways in which success is achieved even following unconventional practices. Thus weighing then I oppose the authors single sided argument that no one can achieve success if conventional practices are followed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2533.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1799591002 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08263877746 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429447852761 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.3304530917 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.722222222 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313802086303 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141618006068 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974791544326 0.0758088955206 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246958150332 0.150359130593 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617709462375 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.