The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition

The issue of wheather leadership depends on sense of cooperation or on the sense of competition can be contentious one. Leadership has a connotation that a persons ability to guide and lead a group of people to achieve their common goals by taking decisions that benefit the group of people overall not just a single or few members in the group or organization. Therefore to achieve an environment that benefit all members I sstrongly believe there need to sense of cooperation. Therefore I strongly agree with authors argument.

Firstly, The notion of leadership only comes into picture if there are group of people, an organization or other set of members who has some common goals or work on some common things so that they need to be organized or guided to achieve their goals. Thus the leadership nature is a combination of sharing, group decisions. Thus for those factors to be achieved their need to be a cooperation within members since in order to share a information the person who knows the information need to provide it willingly that is achieved by cooperation. Similarly, in order to make group decisions then the members need to disscuss the matter at hand in all possible cases and then make best decision even in this scenario the there is the need for cooperation to provide individuals point of views and then cooperatively decide a best solution or outcome of discussion.

Furthermore, leader who is supposed to have better leadership skills also need to drive the group or organization to the goal with minimal effort. This can be possible with sense of cooperation.For example, a group of scientists are working on solving a complex problem with each one is expert in their respective field then to solve a problem that requires sound knowledge of variety of fields, the respective fields scients need to have sense of cooperation to solve the problem. If they lack the cooperation because of competition then each scientist tries to solve the problem individually thus leading to decrease or possibility of problem being solved.

Opposingly some might argue that by having sense of competition than cooperation then there is possiblility to increase rate at whichwork is being carried out. This can be true in some cases but in some this is false. If work is very huge that a single person cannot perform alone.

Thus based on the above points I feel points to support overweight then to oppose. Therefore I feel the to make young people prepare for leadership they need to be initially be injected with a sense of cooperation.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93518518519 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87289315659 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446759259259 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.0635423998 60.3974514979 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.25 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171045243178 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598641635455 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638652514068 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107599321752 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495319710507 0.0667264976115 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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