Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Every individual need to have some basic skills that will help in current modern life style, like earning money, knowing time value, decision making skill etc. So to earn such skill I feel the individual need be independent from parents as soon as possible because parents since they love us provide all the comforts that we need. But I feel we need to learn to get such comforts on our own. Thus I choose that young people need to be independent from their parents as soon as possible.
Firstly, Money is an entity in current world that drives humans. After we wake and before going to sleep we do things that mostly involve money. So an independent person need to know how to earn, spend, invest etc so that he will be able to cope up with current race of life. Having said that, to learn money value I feel individual should be independent as soon as possible from there parents. He may struggle initially to earn but will learn things. If we depend on parents for long time they will provide us money but after that we some how need to earn ourselves so I feel why not do that as early as possible by becoming independent from parents.Example my friend in undergrad used to work in compute r lab in our college to earn money and he has better knowledge of how to intelligently earn money without depending on parents.
Moreover, Decision making skill is one that every individual need to be equipped with because in our life at every stage we are encountered with situations that involve decision making. Bad decision implies bad effect on ones life. When we are with parents they take care of us by also making right decisions for us. So the longer we depend on parents the more they make decisions in our life and we cannot get that decision making skill. So I feel we need to be independent from parent to earn decision making skill.
Furthermore, In my view time and experience are those assets that will increase the individuals value. If we stay with parents we might not get experience of actual life out there. So if we become independent early we might learn and become better experienced that the one how stays longer time with parents and in some sense we are also valuing time. For example, my uncle become independent from his parents in undergrad and he worked in different shops and supply of goods. Having such experience made him start a supply of goods company.
Therefore considering the factors of Money, Decision making and Experience I feel that individual is mostly benefited by becoming independent from parents as soon as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66373626374 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50679164417 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1041700449 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.047619048 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155297412969 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057503182036 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596681908246 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103712732955 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233599741261 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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