The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising
The authors argument that Super Screen produces movies has less viewerhip and to increase it need to be given greater share of movies bugdet to public advertising can or cannot be true. But the logical point used to draw the conclusion is flawed there need to still be provided with more relavent content then needed to make right judgement like how authentic are the reviews given, more elaboration on reasons for less viewers, how much percent did the positive reviews increased, any information regarding negative reviews, how increasing buget share to advertising cannot dampen the quality of movie.
The authors conclusion is mainly based on the point that there is increase in percent of positive reviews. But to judge correctly the author also need to provide exactly how much percent has been increased because there can be a percent of increase of 0.0001% this even comes under increase but we that cannot be considered tremendous thus author need to show that increase is reasonable to be taken into consideration. Further, The author only discusses about the positive reviews but he didn't mention about negative reviews which is a huge factor in decision making, still there need to be comparison of positive and negative reviews too because let's say that percent of negative reviews also increased then this would effect the authors argument.Furthurmore, if negative reviews are more compared to positive reviews then it will entirely question authors point that movie's quality is not the issue.
The linking of increase in positive review percentage to quality of movie is not justified.The author also states that reviews are not reaching prospective viewers, Here the author assumes that if the reviews would have reached viewers then there would have been increase in percentage of viewers. Thus this need to be justified by say providing some statistical evidence of how viewers are effected after going through reviews.
The author mentions that increasing the share of budget for advertising will increase the viewers of movie. But he didn't mention that how this action wouldn't effect the quality of movie, consider advertisements share is increased then that means that there need be a reduction of share in some other sector, there can be good chance that this can effect the quality of movie which will overall negatively effect the authors point that Super Screen movies are of reasonably good quality.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The authors argument that Super Screen produces movies has less viewerhip and to increase it need to be given greater share of movies bugdet to public advertising can or cannot be true.
Error: viewerhip Suggestion: viewer
Error: bugdet Suggestion: budget
Sentence: But the logical point used to draw the conclusion is flawed there need to still be provided with more relavent content then needed to make right judgement like how authentic are the reviews given, more elaboration on reasons for less viewers, how much percent did the positive reviews increased, any information regarding negative reviews, how increasing buget share to advertising cannot dampen the quality of movie.
Error: buget Suggestion: budget
Error: judgement Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: relavent Suggestion: relent
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2009 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.035 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.494 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.853 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.472 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.698 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument that Super Screen produces mov...
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Line 1, column 369, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reviews'' or 'review's'?
Suggestion: reviews'; review's
...ht judgement like how authentic are the reviews given, more elaboration on reasons for ...
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Line 1, column 416, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun viewers is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... given, more elaboration on reasons for less viewers, how much percent did the posi...
^^^^
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r less viewers, how much percent did the positive reviews increased, any informat...
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Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increase'?
Suggestion: increase
... much percent did the positive reviews increased, any information regarding negative rev...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... cannot dampen the quality of movie. The authors conclusion is mainly based o...
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Line 3, column 7, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t dampen the quality of movie. The authors conclusion is mainly based on the point...
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Line 3, column 492, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...usses about the positive reviews but he didnt mention about negative reviews which is...
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Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...sitive and negative reviews too because lets say that percent of negative reviews al...
^^^^
Line 3, column 724, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... reviews also increased then this would effect the authors argument.Furthurmore, if ne...
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Line 3, column 735, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...so increased then this would effect the authors argument.Furthurmore, if negative revie...
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Line 3, column 752, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthurmore
... this would effect the authors argument.Furthurmore, if negative reviews are more compared ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at movies quality is not the issue. The linking of increase in positive revi...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ge to quality of movie is not justified.The author also states that reviews are not...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had reached'?
Suggestion: had reached
... the author assumes that if the reviews would have reached viewers then there would have been incr...
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Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...been increase in percentage of viewers. Thus this need to be justified by say provid...
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Line 7, column 117, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...l increase the viewers of movie. But he didnt mention that how this action wouldnt ef...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...t he didnt mention that how this action wouldnt effect the quality of movie, consider a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, still, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18020304569 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64583044001 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428934010152 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.8473053892 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 133.861454082 57.8364921388 231% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 226.777777778 119.503703932 190% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.7777777778 23.324526521 188% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0637375229779 0.218282227539 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388444872878 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055870128031 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0524485681992 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357939936289 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.9 14.3799401198 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 48.3550499002 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.197005988 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.65 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.1389221557 172% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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