Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs
The argument that inorder to increase the viewers of late-night program and revenue the program shoould have more local news and weather reports may or may not be true, but the supporting points provided by author is not logically sound, like not mentioning about which program received complains specifically, which viewers he wanted to target , and there is information missing like percentage of viewers who view international news and who doesn't.
Firstly, the author says that received complaints about stations coverage of weather and local news on whole but he didn't tell that he received many complaints about late-night program, usage of word "many" for complaints is ambiguious because it might be interpreted in different ways and even he didn't make any conparision with previous years complains which is crucial because it helps in knowing wheather complaints increased or decreased.
Secondly,Author talks about increasing viewers without providing any details about what viewers acctually means like local , global or overall etc. And he even didn't mention the percent of viewers actually contains national news viewers because changing program might effect them which might cause increase in number of complaints still further then that are now.
Thirdly author says that local bussinesses canceled contracts and implied it because of lack of sufficient local and weather news but that might be not logical to conclude without knowing about who the local bussinesses wanted to target , consider of large number of customers of some local bussinesses are for global market then if the advertiser still drops contract then we might be wanting the program to be still provide more national news.
There is instance where authors says about increasing revenue without being explicit about referring about which program he is talking about.
Thus considering all the about the authors argument is not logically sound and confusing in some cases and has missing information to make valid logical conclusions.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1679 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.263 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 53.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.782 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.544 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 1 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.342 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cally, which viewers he wanted to target , and there is information missing like p...
^^
Line 1, column 445, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ers who view international news and who doesnt. Firstly, the author says that rec...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w international news and who doesnt. Firstly, the author says that received c...
^^
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... weather and local news on whole but he didnt tell that he received many complaints a...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...terpreted in different ways and even he didnt make any conparision with previous year...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r complaints increased or decreased. Secondly,Author talks about increasing v...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Author
...ts increased or decreased. Secondly,Author talks about increasing viewers without ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 125, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... what viewers acctually means like local , global or overall etc. And he even didn...
^^
Line 5, column 163, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...al , global or overall etc. And he even didnt mention the percent of viewers actually...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... viewers because changing program might effect them which might cause increase in numb...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts still further then that are now. Thirdly author says that local bussiness...
^^
Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...o the local bussinesses wanted to target , consider of large number of customers o...
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Line 7, column 386, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...iser still drops contract then we might be wanting the program to be still provide more na...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be still provide more national news. There is instance where authors says abo...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t which program he is talking about. Thus considering all the about the autho...
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Line 11, column 38, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... Thus considering all the about the authors argument is not logically sound and con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, thus, talking about, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 314.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49681528662 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73245125165 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490445859873 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 44.0 22.8473053892 193% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 141.454687343 57.8364921388 245% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 246.571428571 119.503703932 206% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 44.8571428571 23.324526521 192% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.8571428571 5.70786347227 313% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209869927468 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10461207603 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693404552957 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11199491158 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730899672361 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.9 14.3799401198 187% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.82 48.3550499002 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.5 12.197005988 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.51 12.5979740519 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.32208582834 116% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.6 11.1389221557 176% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 11.9071856287 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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