In order to become well-rounded individuals, all college students should be required to take courses in which they read poetry, novels, mythology, and other types of imaginative literature.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A person developes his thinking ability and principles through the education that he recieves and the life experiences that he undergo. And if the education is from all domains, then this results in a well-rounded individual, who are viewed in a spotlight by the society. When we stay an individual is well-rounded, what we mean is that the individual is having some sort of experience or knowledge in all or majority of the fields.
It is certainly attractive to be able to stay that we possess knowledge from every field. When we are having such a wide categories of subjects in college, then they help us in getting to know about our culture. When we read poetry, novels or any other type of imaginative literature, then they allow us to know how our culture came into existence, and how it evolved into its current form. It allows an individual to develop some creativity knowledge, which helps in all fields in one way or another. Studying of greek or roman mythology is a good example. Students knowing Roman mythology are educated about the ways in which they used govern their people, being one of the first democracy. This knowledge may help an individual in taking decisions and allows a student to become well-rounded, by knowing how democracy came into existence, and the way it was followed.
While well-rounded individuals are seeked by society, they come at an expensive price. For allowing college students to study any type of imaginative literature, they have to take time out of the subjects in which they are actually interested in. These are the subjects that will help them to get a job in future. So, it could be said that a lot of time is wasted behind imaginative literature, which contributes very little to the individuals future. Not only time, lot of energy is being spend in reading and understanding the complicated literature, which may be obscure to individuals who are not interested in this field. So, after studing mathematics and science, which are complicated also, these college students would have to waste their mental energy behind understanding poetry and novels, just so that they could pass in these subjects. Also, to have classes in poerty, novels or any other imaginative literature, the college would need to hire teachers, which in turn would cost students their money. These money being spend on subjects having no real contribution to the student's field of interest could be instead spend by students in a more useful way. A good example would be of a Engineering student who is studying logical subjects, which actually contribute to his career in future. However, if courses of imaginative literature are made required, then it may result in the student being well-rounded. But this would come at the cost of his/her time, energy and money, which could be utilised in a better way to make his/her job more successful.
Therefore, while it is in societies benefit to have well-rounded individuals, who are aware about the culture, and many other things, such individuals are molded that way in an expensive way. So, college should provide an option for students to take courses in imaginative literature, but should not make them as required. These would allow interested students to take those courses, and become well-rounded, while other students can untilise their resources in other ways, helping them with their jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...which actually contribute to his career in future. However, if courses of imaginative lit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, while, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2821.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 565.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99292035398 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8257810895 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433628318584 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 916.2 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9849508001 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.541666667 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5416666667 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299680953721 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908578070224 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599337625815 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169167586711 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780362133141 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.