As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Over the last century, we have witnessed the development of technology in ways never seen before in the human history. we have observed the way technology has completely altered people’">people’s way of life and continues to do so. some may be concerned that our reliance on technology will deteriorate our minds, and eventually lead us to an destructive end. However, this notion is unfounded. In fact, not only does technology free people’">people’s mind and body from minuscule tasks, it is also one of the fundamental building blocks that fosters innovations and development.
Firstly, technology enables our ability to focus on more significant matters by aiding in the performance of minuscule and repetitive tasks. For instance, the invention of laundry machines and dishwashers reduced the time and effort spent performing physical labor that has little to no mental stimulation or deeper meaning. Unlike what certain people would claim, technology does the exact opposite of “deteriorating the mind”. Rather, it emancipates people from mentally unstimulating chores and empowers them to exploring their minds on various aspects of life now have the opportunity to do so.
As technology frees up people from repetitive tasks, people begin to utilize other forms of technology as means to excite their minds and to connect great minds together. development of airplanes, smartphones, the internet, and online platforms connect people and minds alike. On the other hand, games and puzzles stimulate the minds of people, providing help to develop the brain capacities of children, and to slow down the cerebral deterioration of the elderly. Furthermore, technological innovations are often build on previous inventions. take the example of computer science, programmers use programming languages, an invention from their predecessors, to develop applications that further assist people in their lives. this way, a virtuous circle can be manifested, in which technology continues to act as a galvanizer of our minds, and as a result, we continue to cultivate greater technological progress and development.
some might argue that technologies take away the opportunity of manually completing tasks that contribute to the well-being of the brain. For example, more and more students cannot compute the correct answer to mathematical questions without the use of calculators. While it is impossible to definitely disapprove the assertion that technology inhibits the performance of certain tasks, it is crucial to note that the benefit of many recent development overshadows this impact. The students may have shifted their attention from evaluating each equation manually to comprehending more difficult theorems and concepts. Ultimately, people cannot foster development at the current rate if they place their focus solely on minuscule matters, like evaluating a complicated quadratic equation by hand. it is imperative for people to strive to improve on more significant issues.
In conclusion, we should not blame technology for the deterioration of the mind. Conversely, technology has helped us to be liberated from the inefficiency of performing tasks that do not have greater purposes, and continues to galvanize our minds and promote innovations. what we should question instead is to what extent is attempting to perform tasks manually meaningful. people are not suspicious of the purpose beneath unconditionally following a tradition as much as they are circumspect of the emergence of technology. After all, history has proved the blind belief that traditional routes are superior to changes to be inherently flawed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, after all, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3145.0 2235.4752809 141% => OK
No of words: 553.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68716094033 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.59013800614 2.79657885939 128% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533453887884 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 989.1 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7626382934 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.961538462 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2692307692 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88461538462 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155554302765 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047358322946 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412224982534 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924859553784 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303552468699 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.72 12.1639044944 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 100.480337079 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.