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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making

The debate arisen by the author is one of significant importance and have always elicited the ambivalent stances of brilliant minds, from philosophers to scientists. Behaviours denote plethora of aspects comprised of undertaken actions or reactions to external and internal vicissitudes, which might found their grounds in very different forces. While the assumption awkwardly overlooks the ability of people to think and behave on their own, I am partly in accordance with it and would be substantiating my views in the subsequent passages.

A defining constituent of the decision-making has been called "superego" by the Deutsch philosopher Freud who bestow the accountability of most human's behaviours on this obscure part of our brain. It encompasses stakeholders such as family, rules established by laws, and impacts and shapes the adults we will be along the childhood. This exposure find wide merits and is acknowledgeable in myriad scenarios. Most of our actions are indeed determined by our social and familial environment, to the extent that we wouldn't even be able to explain the genesis of such things, right from how eating, more or less common to our species, to the most intricate cultural traditions that vary from one region to another.

The lens by which this statement stands by can be extrapolated into behaviours only a few erudite would have the answer to. Many conundrums concatenated to past problems, fears, or gluts dictate the majority of our decisions. Human mind absorbs all the situations and informations one would pass through, stores it, and most often influences choices and the chosen path. Mistakenly would people have the pretension of being fully aware of the forces around them, that constitutes itself an entire field of study known as the neurosciences.

Since post-agrarian societies, determining others' behaviours has even grown to be a business. Most companies expend a fortune to have an impact on the way people make purchases, look at hoardings and so on, without them having the slightest clue about the reasons they did it. When it comes to materialism, like any other inveterate habit, people are subject to forces not of their own, and some techniques are transmitted to be more efficient.

Though it would be up to a maverick to do so, one can't fail to consider the decision-making made on purpose, especially when people decide to go against rules, habits or laws. It is true even in religions, which advocate for humans to have their own path of reasoning. While it is true that no action or reaction arise from a silo or a vacuum but mainly grows of surroundings, some instances refute such a determinism. Children growing in poor areas who go on to be successful and break the social glass ceiling don't have people around them to exert a positive influence and thus rely only on their own determination. Passion, which is deemed as inherent to individuals, drive people in their life and far outweigh the impact of any external forces.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: finds
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding forces'?
Suggestion: the surrounding forces
... the pretension of being fully aware of the forces around them, that constitutes itself an entire fiel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, thus, while, such as, it is true, more or less

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2522.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11561866126 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05712689885 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590263691684 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8457555625 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.736842105 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9473684211 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203196618578 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568316177614 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571136985398 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114030309204 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682149336609 0.0667264976115 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 100.480337079 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, so, thus, while, such as, it is true, more or less

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments