Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than immediate fame and recognition

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than immediate fame and recognition

Contemporary society embodies an increasing pace of life, the race to immediate recognition and fame being one of its most insidious corollary. Additionally, to most people the surest path to blissfully and peacefully fulfil their needs would be by sticking to a realistic goal. However, the unqualified assumption merits further discussion, for short-term goals aren’t necessarily paired with seeking immediate reward, and realism tends to be subjective.

To begin with, one can’t fail to consider that immediate fame or recognition, as implied in the very adjective’s derivation, are at variance with long-term efforts and travail, notwithstanding these are entrenched trademarks of actual success. Some research conducted in the United States reveal to us that most children falling short of their scholastic potential have its genesis in their myopic approach of life, which evolves along a continuum and is a long journey rather than a sprint, though. This has several reverse consequences on individuals when they grow up, but also on society as a whole. The race to fast money-making, and immediate recognition’s seeking then, exemplifies this deleterious facet of our society.

Along the advent of social networks as well as the runaway growth of population, the insidious idea that success, fame or even reward are within easy reach, is mushrooming. A few mavericks aside, it would be hard for a young and sophomore teenager not to be deceived or attracted by this perception. Therefore, the author’s statement finds even more merits inasmuch as only adults have the benefit of the hindsight and the experience required to properly direct children in the meet path forward. The incipient appearance of a middle class worldwide undergirds this view, for many young people close in on achievements and opportunities that were before quixotic for their parents. In this regard, the familial nest as well as the educators or psychologists in the educational surrounding are instrumental not only in encouraging but also in guiding and helping them carve out a strong personality to burgeon in the long-run.

It is also true that success is the tip of iceberg, often the easiest part to envy or admire; but there is an underlying feature common in many reputable people. Be it in sport, academia or corporate worlds, the main constituents of one reaching their zenith are arduous work and dedication; and only in being encouraged and conveyed that these are the unique reliable values in life, will children be able to understand its very essence. 

No one should however be remiss on the dormant but harmful innuendos of the author’s statement. To recount from the introduction, the so-called realistic goals differ from one another, and what might be perceived as a chimera by the majority is nothing but a palpable objective for others. It is also true that the taste for taking risks gets contained as people grow older, and this phenomenon is, in my opinion, as deleterious as is the sought-after immediate fame. Indeed, the myopic views of certain parents and professionals circumscribe the children’s dreams and to some extent, prevent these very same dreams from becoming realistic goals. Most people also tend to associate long-term goals with academic paths, but realistic goals can also be very short-term objectives, which one after the other, constitute a long journey. Since our society evolves, so must do the mindsets, and the idea that children having short-term views are mesmerised by money or fame, is erroneous and ageist.

To conclude, there is an irrefutable correlation between realistic and long-term goals, which still proves to be the sturdiest way for the majority to blossom throughout life. All people should however be cognisant that the idiosyncrasies peculiar to each distinct persona are the reason for our heterogeneity and our species rising to prominence; and these should prevail over nay form of normative pattern.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 440, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be able to understand its very essence. 
 No one should however be remiss on the d...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3355.0 2235.4752809 150% => OK
No of words: 633.0 442.535393258 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30015797788 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01592376844 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98793355948 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 343.0 215.323595506 159% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541864139021 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 1036.8 704.065955056 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.1137405165 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.5 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7727272727 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45454545455 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348490628006 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853889368542 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570163560903 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165266031751 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064562668794 0.0667264976115 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 190.0 100.480337079 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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