People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I agree with the statement that people’s behavior is largely determined by forces that they do not have control over. Whether it may be children or adults, behavior is influenced by factors within one’s environment, such as one’s setting at home and school, or one’s stance from political and technological influences. While it can be argued that outside forces out of one’s control does not determine people’s behavior but rather forces of their own, uncontrollable forces have a larger impact on behavior.
In the basis of psychology, it has been argued that influences within one’s environment can affect behavior. One’s own home environment and surrounding community influences behavior. For instance, children are highly susceptible to behave accordingly to forces that are out of their control. At home, if parents demonstrate a large influence of activities in reading, writing, playing, and healthy eating, children are inclined to read, write, and play, which enhances their development. However, if parents do not prompt healthy activities, then children are capable of falling behind in school and fitness. Therefore, outside influences that are out of children’s reach can influence their behavior, since parents have more control over their activities. Additionally, the surrounding community outside of home also plays a major role in human behavior. For instance, adolescents are influenced by peers at school, in which exposure to their behavior is out of one’s control. Adolescents are at an age where they are influenced by peer pressure. Therefore, being surrounded by positive or negative peers can influence them to take or disregard responsibility in choices.
On the other hand, larger forces can influence human behavior, such as political and technological innovation. In the domain of politics, laws and regulations that are established influence human responses within a society. For instance, the United States law during the 1800s that prohibited the African Americans to vote influenced their behavior to take part in political decisions. However, when the law was repealed in the 1900s, African Americans were able to vote and participate in society at a larger stance. Another large force that influences human behavior is technology. Technology has impacted the livelihood of humans. For instance, prior to the innovation of cars and other modes of transportation, people were accustomed to walking and perhaps using a horse to get to places. Today, people move quicker at the speed of transportation. Hence, larger forces of politics and technology are forces out of one’s control, which can play a major influence on human behavior.
While it may be true that uncontrollable external forces influence human behavior, it can be argued that one’s behavior is largely determined by one’s own influence. People with a strong internal locus of control show that external forces do not influence their behavior, in which they are able to take matters and decisions in their own hands. For instance, children do not always have to listen to parents, in which they can choose to decide whether they want to read or play a sport. Additionally, when they become adolescents, they may not listen to peer pressure and have a strong asset in making their own decisions and own friends. Therefore, one’s own influence does play a role in one’s behavior. However, it is not the largest determination on behavior. Forces ranging from one’s home environment to politic decisions and technology have a greater influence on humans and ultimately impact their livelihoods.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3062.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 565.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41946902655 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87542086881 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98900588147 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408849557522 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 959.4 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3397934146 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.586206897 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4827586207 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.03448275862 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202548255253 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704937837117 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584246470192 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153974476362 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432750099594 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.