People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

We commonly hear from parents that when their child makes mistakes, they argue by saying that their child was not of the bad type and he is under influence of someone. The prompt says that personality and characteristics of an individual is a result of his surrounding factor rather than his own. I mostly agree with the prompt in two ways. However, there are a few cases in which the nature of a person is his self-mentality.
Firstly, one of the major factors playing role in human behavior is religion. Religion has so deeply rooted in human mind that it directly influences a person way of thinking be the person a literate or illiterate. For example, a Christian person when in trouble remembers Jesus Christ. For him, Christ is almighty whereas Buddhist people worship Buddha. Of course, Buddhist respect Christ but they do never have that faith on him or put him in a position as kept by Christian people. This is all due to the mentality developed by the facts and opinion they hear since childhood and from their fellow relatives and friends.
Another factor that influences people is their family and friends. People not deliberately gets accustomed to the type of circle that surround them. For example, a child grown up in a wealthy family hates to eat from a street cart or van but a child of poor family who rarely gets to eat outside values the food of the street cart highly. Moreover, a child grown in serious family is naturally serious and gets disturbed by a slight deviation from habitual action. But, a child from a jovial family has that sense of humor and also neglects slight error during work. These characteristics are not developed by a person will but the by the situations where he is exposed.
Despite the environment surrounding a person the character he displays is a result of his self will and what he thinks is proper. For instance, there are a large number of children living in an orphanage. They commonly have same background of having lost their parents one way or other. These children are taught in a same school, given same moral principles by their warden, have common shelter and are usually exposed to similar conditions. But we can never expect them to be same. Some are kind whereas others are greedy. Some inclines themselves to good deeds and the other to the polarity. These characteristics of an individual is not by eternal forces but by his self-feelings and the action which he thinks is correct.
Thus, it can be inferred that the morality, wisdom and direction that a person wants to follow is an outcome primarily determined by the nature of circle that surrounds him but his own making also shares some factor of the characteristics he portrays.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, moreover, so, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75583864119 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69064034018 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494692144374 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.1719269502 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.84 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104066736727 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030275643547 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0253719105751 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0582894886759 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175064079215 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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