People s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The range of behaviours are various by each person, and there are many thoughts about how these are determined. Some insist that one’s own will is the most dominant factor to decide which action to take as people have free will to choose when facing situations. However, in fact, people’s decisions are also largely influenced by other factors such as genetic or cultural reasons rather than their own decisions.
Firstly, many of people’s behaviours are genetically innate, rather than decided by their own making. For instance, when people touch a hot stuff, they automatically detach their hands from the stuff. This behaviour is not made after thinking about what to do at that moment, but just a natural behaviour as our genes have developed for survival for a long time. Not only for this kind of unconscious behaviours, but some of our characteristics are also affected by genes. A glut of studies has been discovered that aggressiveness is partially determined by genes. For example, although two adopted children have been grown in a similar circumstance, they showed different aggressiveness, and it was related to their parents. It shows that genes can be considered as the transcendent factor of one’s own will.
Secondly, cultural influences cannot be ignored in deciding their own behaviours. Social norms are different from each society, for example, east Asian countries put more importance on being harmonious with each other by reducing their uniqueness, whereas European or North American countries more highlight admitting the differences and respecting them. It results in different behaviour patterns when facing the same situation between east Asian and European. Hence, it shows many parts of human being’s behaviours are affected by their culture apart from one’s decision.
Some parts of people’s decisions are decided by their own will and making. However, the assertion that the will is the dominant factor to determine behaviour patterns looks resulted from a lack of considerations as other seemingly more influential factors exist such as genetic and cultural effect.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, whereas, apart from, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 332.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38855421687 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86759010581 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55421686747 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3245580488 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.8125 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.21951772744 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132772588265 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472622395539 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328089903019 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856939234507 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314021621496 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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