People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
“Humans are nothing but slaves of our past.” This famous english proverb highlights the passive thinking that humans have developed over the years. In fact this thought forms the very basis of behavioural and psychoanalysis schools of thought in psychology. However, I mostly disagree with this stance. There is no doubt that there are forces in childhood and adult life as well, which influence our comportment but, human behaviour is much more robust and independent to be totally a slave of unseen forces. I argue this for 2 reasons to be exact.
First and foremost, if people’s behaviour is largely a result of constrains posed by childhood instances and daily life events then creativity and individuality have been nothing but mirage of ocean in a hot dessert. Therefore, those who believe that nothing is under their control tend to become pessimistic and sluggish over time; leaving the reins of their life on the phrase “go with the flow,” Such thinking is detrimental for the society and individual growth. It leads to a fallacy prone thinking where there’s always an unforeseen and uncontrollable cause of the behaviour.
Second, if behaviour is a result of drives not in handle of humans then, the act of living itself loses its meaning and thus, we all are just existing like puppets in the hands of a puppeteer. However, such is not the case. For instance, in 1940s when Hitler overtook Germany and started executing Jews in concentration camps; all but hope was left. In this pessimistic environment, Viktor Frankl maintained his optimistic behaviour and hope of reuniting with his family. This independent thinking of self in own control led to him being the only survivor in his family apart from his sister.
Therefore, while it is tempting to believe that our behaviour is not in our hands; it is not but an excuse to pardon our wrong behaviour.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 305, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
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Suggestion: many
...roup of mindless humans working without much questions and protests. However, the gl...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ein, Newton, Jeff Besos, Bill Gates etc. Some might argue that there are examples...
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Suggestion:
...up with creations that shake the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24193548387 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7953153344 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559907834101 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5190209191 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7916666667 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0833333333 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167877352586 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471465456188 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383858644532 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964096853299 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343082186222 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.