People should question the rules of authority as opposed to accepting them passively.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider reasons for which the statement may or may not be true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The degree of authoritanism or totalitarism in a government varies greatly. While in Platon’s Utopia, the ideal state is described as the one with very strict rules, in Golding’s Lord of the Flies we are presented with a society in which there are no rules at all. The rules of Platon’s ideal state is unquestionable, whereas, in Lord of the Flies, the children do not even have a rule to question. Considering both literary pieces and the societal problems they come across as the storyline goes on, one can easily promote the idea that neither is ideal. Thus, the question to ask is: “Is it possible to temper both sides and find a common ground?
As a person who was born and braised in Turkey, I can say that I know how a society without a critical mind acts very well. One of the prohibitions that are standing on a shaky ground is on abortion. As a person who has little knowledge about Turkey might guess that each year, -I would like to use active form here- many men rape women and these women sometimes forced to marry the person who rapes her. The power given to these women to have an abortion is taken away from them. The moment they apply to a hospital for an appointment, the government lets their parents know that their daughter is pregnant. I think that this is a rule to be questioned deeply.
Thus, one can promote the idea that the rules especially directed towards human rights have to be questioned. I agree with that idea. Furthermore, I believe that referendums are important steps to take in case of big decisions concerning the majority of the society. However, In order not to hinder the legislative process of the parliament, some of the rules might be approved without further fuss. Such as rules in benefit of children, women and other minority groups.
As you probably know, 1st of May is celebrated as the Labor Day in many parts of the world. In Turkey, it creates a big chaos and the police uses deterrent force against “provocators”, even though they are simply people with the pursuit of their own rights. At one Labor Day, I saw a yellow line written “It is forbidden to cross the line”. If you cross the line, you are in the big square named İstiklal and it is the place hosting the Labor Day protests for years. It is forbidden because you just “cannot” go there, the government does not want you to be protesting for your rights.
After walking a little bit more, I reached the metro line and started to wait for the next train to arrive. I noticed that the same yellow line was there too, written “It is forbidden to cross the line” on. However, this time, it was forbidden because if you cross it, you will be crushed by the train.
The reason why I stated these two instances is because, there are some rules to question in the world. If the rule is directed towards your basic human rights such as protesting, you certainly must question it. However, if it is for the benefit of you or other people, if it is protecting your life or privacy, in my opinion, little further negotiation over the issue is highly adequate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 343, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... legislative process of the parliament, some of the rules might be approved without further...
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Line 8, column 224, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'peopled'.
Suggestion: peopled
...tors', even though they are simply people with the pursuit of their own rights. A...
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Line 10, column 17, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ing for your rights. After walking a little bit more, I reached the metro line and star...
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Line 12, column 45, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...reason why I stated these two instances is because, there are some rules to question in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, well, whereas, while, as for, i think, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2589.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 555.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66486486486 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7497880477 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506306306306 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 817.2 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6691851091 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8888888889 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205275861735 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556857249052 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533038533522 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102588054505 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514732784643 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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