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Started thinking emotionally and then logically is considered as inefficient decision making. I believe that people should start thinking about a particular cases logically, unless this issue is not considered sentimental or is not able to the logical evaluation made upon, such as personality factors or love relationships.
Using the right side of the brain which means using people's cognitive ability opens the door for critical evaluation of a variety of factors involved in the process of decision making. This makes individuals free from any biases which they can consider subconsciously while justifying a specific argument. Sole reliability on emotions can most of the times lead to decisions in which all the opposing sides are not judged thoroughly. For example, in the family relationships great majority of scandals arise due to the inability of family members to think critically and logically while communicating and solving disputes. Mostly children, especially teenagers, rely completely on their emotions due to their fragile juvenile psychology: they tend not to listen to their parents and are not eager to consider their point of view. Therefore, this will eventually lead to increased miscommunication and conflicts within the family.
On the other hand, in some cases thinking only cognitively does not result in efficient decisions. For example, think about a situation in the workplace, where a particular employee's parent has died and she asks her manager to assign her additional vacation to organize her father's funerals. Here legislation does not allow a supervisor to give an employee vacation, but emotionally it is understandable that this worker will not be able to work thoroughly and it means that additional days-off here are necessary. As a result, some scenarios can foster emotional decision making instead of logical one owing to the inability of logic to understand people's feelings.
In conclusion, while mostly it is appropriate to justify the decisions by logic in order to consider all sides and factors, in some personal matters where individuals' feeling and sensitivity is included it is better to firstly evaluate issues emotionally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44837758112 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05834698947 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578171091445 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0725750727 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.076923077 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3846153846 5.21951772744 199% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123797400932 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465963088742 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05554124667 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744909985561 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155639554637 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.1 8.38706741573 120% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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