People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.
Decision making is a very important skill that every intellectual people possess. Without proper decisions a problem could not be tackled in the most efficient way. This prompt suggests that people who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic later are poor decision makers. I strongly agree with this. Since, people who are clouded by emotions are obstructive towards logic. I feel this way for the two reasons.
First, The decisions that are made by emotions are not very strong as they might lack logic and could become dangerous for anyone innocent. For example, Karan, a 16 year old boy studying in Mumbai high school, was falsely accused of molestation towards one of his girl classmate. The girl was the one to accuse him of such actions, After hearing the girl's accuses against the boy, people in their neighbourhood were completely clouded by emotions and started attacking the boy without even considering his side's plea. The boy was then arrested and bashed all throughout the social media platforms. But, after thorough investigation by the Police, it was known that the boy was completely innocent, and the girl justified that she wanted to get revenge on the boy as he had just broken up with her. From this, we can say that when people are taking decisions based on emotions and completely ignoring any logic, it will be dangerous for any innocent person or it might backfire on the decision maker themselves. The decisions that are clouded by emotions not only might lack logic but also justice.
Secondly, The aftermath of a emotion based decision might be more severe than we can think. For instance, Aaditha Karikalan, The prince of Chola Dynasty, dating back to 15th century, was a war-maniac who was entirely driven by decisions clouded by his emotions. During his teen times, He fell in love with the princess of the opposition kingdom, The Pandiyas. They were both completely in love until, The princess was forcibly married to another prince of the Cheran kingdom. After knowing this, The prince became very furious and started to wage war in all directions of his kingdom. Though, he might justify that the kingdom have won most of the wars and increased their dynasty vastly, The kingdoms that lost had formed an alliance and seeked revenge against the Chola kingdom. This led to the demise of the entire Chola dynasty. The prince's emotionally clouded decisions were the demise of his own kingdom.
Of course, one might argue that emotions are very strong and the decisions made form it will be strong as well. But, in most of the cases, as we have seen from the examples above, Decisions that are taken by emotions will always backfire as danger. Thus, a person who makes decisions based on his emotions and justify later with logic is a bad decision maker.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, as for, for example, for instance, i feel, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2345.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89561586639 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44094122124 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488517745303 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.8312693103 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7083333333 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9583333333 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.447100886642 0.243740707755 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145862642256 0.0831039109588 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.180982939317 0.0758088955206 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.341288249839 0.150359130593 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170177455425 0.0667264976115 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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