People who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for public good | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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People who pursue their own intellectual interests for purely personal reasons are more likely to benefit the rest of the world than are people who try to act for public good.

The author claim that people acting out of their own interest can benefit the world more than the people who act for public good. The contention presented is too generalized and also assert more than one claim in the argument. First the speaker generalized that people have only two polarized intention one in own good and another is public good. In reality this is not the case every time, for people it depends on event to events. Second claim is that intention of own good can offer more to public than the genuine intention of doing actually public good. While I concede that there are some cases of serendipity in all events but the intention matters despite the outcome of any action.

All human being have mélange of emotion, which varies from time to time and also depends on the trend on his/her own life. So, we cannot directly generalize all people in term of self-interest intention and public interest intention all the time. A sincere social activist usually work for the welfare of the nation or territory he/ she dwells in, but there are several action in life that has been taken just out of personal interest, it can be as genuine as finding as good private school for his/her own child at the same time fighting for children rights. Similarly, any business acting out of self interest and after making billions, ostensibly move to philanthropic activities. These sort of changes in intention of human being happens very often.

Secondly the author suggest that people acting out of self interest can offer more good tot he society. Well, this is true scenario when people are just minding their own business and in the offing does not hurt other people coming in the way. There are several context of this scenario. When we as individual mind our own business and keep doing our part of the job wit complete honesty then everything associated remains in place and impute to the harmony and welfare of the society as a whole. On the other hand, people acting out of public interest might sometime bring chaos into the society and in the long term do more harm than good. The history is replete with several such examples.

But, the above scenario is not a quixotic scenario. People often forget their fine line between maintaining one's own job finely and self-interest to the extent of hurting others by not caring about the society. Again people looking out for others may actually bring a change in the society rather than breaking the harmony. People like Mahatma Gandhi and Martin King Luther Jr, fought with the intention of public welfare and changed the history along with them for good.

In sum, we cannot generalize people intention and outcome with a yes and no scale as there are several other environmental and natural phenomena, affecting the outcome of any moves. The the world has a tendency of bringing out the best for itself, matching every scenario for its convenience in the long run.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun action seems to be countable; consider using: 'several actions'.
Suggestion: several actions
...ritory he/ she dwells in, but there are several action in life that has been taken just out of...
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Message: Did you mean 'this sort' or 'These nulls'?
Suggestion: This sort; These nulls
...sibly move to philanthropic activities. These sort of changes in intention of human being ...
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...tion of human being happens very often. Secondly the author suggest that people ...
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Message: Did you mean 'to the'?
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...ut of self interest can offer more good tot he society. Well, this is true scenario wh...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun context seems to be countable; consider using: 'several contexts'.
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...her people coming in the way. There are several context of this scenario. When we as individual...
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...d the history along with them for good. In sum, we cannot generalize people inte...
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...io for its convenience in the long run.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, well, while, sort of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 506.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81422924901 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35882294399 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48418972332 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6616160468 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.913043478 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384413683124 0.243740707755 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111136649633 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122936533211 0.0758088955206 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216837792783 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0917012378657 0.0667264976115 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, well, while, sort of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments