People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting

Behavior of a person defines the way people react in a certain situation. The behavior actually guide the actions and responses. Then a logical question arises that how this behavior is inculcated in that person ? Is it something associated with the genetics ? or is something related to the environment ? or is it something shaped by the person himself ? The issue here presents dilemma of determining cause of one's behavior. I believe that behavior of any person is strongly influenced by the environment in which one is being nurtured.

Just after the birth a person starts to get influenced by his surroundings. The nursing staff take care of his or her health by keeping him or her under intensive care. The parents take care of his nutritional requirements and as soon as the person reaches the age at which he or she can appreciate the world around, the parents start to teach in order to prepare him or her for the future. This teaching continues throughout the remaining life of a person, however the number of teachers start to grow. Every little thing influences the person, may it be as insignificant as a small ant or may be it is as enormous and fierce as a tiger. From ant one learns the value of discipline and perseverance, while the tiger teaches the bravery and importance of standing up for yourself. Thus the environment around influence the person and reflect in its behavior.

If one has a keen sense of observation, one can find the similarity of behavior of a particular class of people. For example the people with high social standing and rich background behave in a more haughty manner as compare to people from lower social classes. Although there are minor exceptions to this but generally it holds true. The reason for them to behave in similar manner is because of the influence by the environmental factors in which they have been brought up. This influence is just not restricted to the social classes but also extends in other dimensions. The similarity of behavior can easily be observed among people of same geographical location, race , religion or even institutions. Therefore the conditions in which a person has been brought up plays a significant role in shaping his behavior.

There has been a debate for sometime that whether nature determines the behavior or is it the nurturing. The proponents of the 'nature' theory argues that the genetics determine how a person would behave in a certain situation. While it could have been a small factor the examples supporting the 'nurturing' theory are far more ubiquitous. One can observe that the people of under develop world usually are not very particular about the hygiene and environmental pollution. However, once they visit the developed world and get influenced by the local population they usually change themselves and become aware of the consequences of being negligent towards hygiene and ultimately correct themselves.

Although there can be varying opinions about the issue but the evidence suggests that more often than not the behavior is determined by the factors that are actually not controlled by the person himself but in fact are determined by the environment in which that person lives.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...on would behave in a certain situation. While it could have been a small factor the e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2666.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 535.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98317757009 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.828220999 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469158878505 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 855.9 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.7796311301 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2142857143 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1071428571 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32142857143 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132493578257 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373276349183 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.030569898629 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821813676746 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213658945811 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.8971910112 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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