The question that has been posed here is "Whether the accelerated pace of modern day life is resolving our problems or is it other way around?". Societies are a combination of different types of people. While some might be very intelligent, industrious, physically fit and highly motivated whereas others have untoward personality traits like ordinary IQ level, torpidity, invigorating and less enthusiastic. This basically means that every person can work on its on pace and would not be able to contribute in the same manner like others. A healthy society should be the one in which everyone has a place and where everyone could exercise his abilities to make progress and contribute towards a healthy living. So the rapidity of modern day life might suite a few, however it would not be possible for everyone to match pace with it.
A system that is only suitable for a few privileged people is bound to collapse. Imagine a society which only supports the exceptionally talented and intelligent people and neglects others; this society would produce disharmony and lack of empathy. The ultimate result would be that those who cannot match the pace of upper class talented people would eventually be out of work. This would result in an increasing burden on the fast pacers and eventually they would also be exhausted and this would result in an ultimate 'Dooms Day' scenario.
The proponents of of the idea of 'fast paced life' argues that it would result into accelerated development. As a consequence of which economic progress would be achieved which would ultimately translate into the improvement of quality of life. This idea might hold true to some extent however if one analyses this perceptively it can be inferred that the quality of life may actually decrease as a consequence of this. The reason for this is that the fast pace life would require more time and efforts from the people. This requirement would have to be catered from the time that is actually currently available for recreational activities. Therefore the fast pace hectic life style would induce more fatigue both physically and mentally and would eventually result in the deterioration in the quality of life.
Going through the arguments it could be concluded that fast pace life style can only be maintained by a limited faction of society and this would result in alienating a large faction of a society. Furthermore, the accelerated pace is eventually going to effect the quality of life. Therefore, the rapidity might accelerate development but it would definitely induce more problems than it can resolve.
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...duce more problems than it can resolve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 30.0 12.4196629213 242% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08158508159 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83902495646 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477855477855 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2080182879 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.736842105 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5789473684 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57894736842 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165115854477 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0655280830636 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653827228487 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117773611916 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631726157379 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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