The topic asserts that our actions are mostly the result of factors that have nothing to do with ourselves or we do not have any significant influence in the illustration of our behavior. While the statement can hold true in many circumstances, however there are situations and instances in which people act according to their own will. Therefore, the statement is only partially agreeable.
According to psychologists, peoples' behavior is largely determined by three factors. The first one is the genetics by which are some personality traits are inherited from ancestors. The second one is the environmental influences or grooming, which shape the personality of a person while he / she grows up. The third one is the morality which forces a person to act in accordance with the established moral standards. Sigmund Freud summarizes this by presenting the concept of ID, Ego and Super Ego. The ID corresponds to Genetics while Ego corresponds to the reality or environment and super ego represents the morality. Out of these three, morality based actions are determined by the person himself, the actions that are result of environmental influences and genetics are not entirely based on one's free will. Therefore, the cause of one's behavior cannot be attributed solely to the person's free will.
Moreover, the behavior of people differs as we move around different countries, regions or even in different neighborhood of the same city. This points out to the fact that few of the factors that determine one's behavior are culture, social class, educational background and economics. All these factors are largely not one own making. For instance, one does not choose his culture and social class, usually these are assigned to a person by virtue of his birth. Similarly, while there are exceptions very few manage to change their economic conditions; and educational opportunities are somewhat linked to ones financial status. Very few people manage to alter there social and economic status and majority usually surrenders to the fate.
However, situation is not so helpless, people do influence their behavior. Take for instance the anger management we do during our daily life. While, the situation may be such that might instigate anger and our impulse reaction would be to hit the other person, however many a times we calm ourselves and manage to control our angry behavior.Similarly we handle or manage our emotions and stress; and alter our impulsive behavior. These few examples suggest that people are not entirely helpless and they do have a influence on their behavior.
Despite, the behavior of people is determined by the factors that are beyond their control, however their are situations in which people alter their behavior by their own free will. This taking control of their behavior is largely influenced by morality. Therefore, while in most situations people's behavior is influenced by environmental factors or upbringing, there are instances in which people do act according to their free will.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, similarly, so, therefore, third, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2545.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2366255144 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87660543974 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432098765432 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7414075819 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.041666667 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182730715979 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648729778058 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540847415711 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115925394022 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0549234482556 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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